Lingering Soul – 150 Word Flash Fiction

The snow struck the paned windows in continuous blows. Lizbeth planned to finish her novel before the holidays and would stay the week.

“I’d like to rent the Hartman cottage.” The agent had gawked at her choice.

“Did something happen?” Lizbeth quickly dismissed the thought.

Latex paint lingered in the air. Something about the new overstuffed floral sofas and matching curtains seemed “off.”

As she padded into the bedroom, a floor board sprung back. “What are you hiding?”

She stooped and ran her fingers along the hickory plank then pried it up. An old pink diary laid on the dusty underlayment.

Her heart pounded as she unsnapped the clasp and flipped to the last page. In red ink it said, “I’VE HAD ENOUGH!” Then the lights went out.


“Did you know her?” asked the sheriff.

“We met when she rented the Hartman place. I should’ve warned her.”

“What a mess.”

Have you ever gone on vacation and rented a place that gave you the creeps? 

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30 thoughts on “Lingering Soul – 150 Word Flash Fiction

  1. This is the second week in a row I’ve discovered another flash fiction piece that took the same idea I had and ran with it. It’s giving me a sinking feeling. I promise, I don’t read the other entries until mine is written. Like you, NaNo is one my brain and I think about holing up.

    I love the contrast you create in your story between the weather and the flowered curtains. Robin


  2. Wow! I love how you pulled this story off. It left me tantalized and craving more reads like this. Just wish I knew what happened but with the word count constraints, it’s not exactly possible.


    • Thanks Michelle! I know what you mean and as it was I went over by 50 words. Next time when the story really calls for more description I think I will go for it. and go to a 200 word total….


    • Seriously!
      I think since I am writing a lparanormal fiction thriller novel, I will stay on the same ghostly theme, but maybe lighten up a bit. We’ll see. I sure love writing the darker ones….


  3. Dear Susie,

    A lovely, tight little story. Spooky and mysterious. One comment, a niggling thing: I don’t think a choice can be gawked at in the way you wrote it. I think I know what you meant but….
    Also, and this is just an impression, I don’t think you needed the quotation marks for the word “off”. It read quite well without them.

    Good job. (Let me know if you don’t want the above comments in my comments, okay? Thanks.)




    • Thanks Doug for reading and your constructive criticism. The idea was that a lot had happened there and the agent wanted to say something but didn’t. It’s hard with so few words~ : )


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