Traxin retracted his periscopic neck and braced himself for impact as his insect-like ship spiraled through the atmosphere. He strained his yellow eye while staring through the portal desperate to stabilize the shaking craft. It rose to the peak of ascension, hesitating for a split second before plummeting towards Earth.
Above the engine’s roar Traxin shouted, “That is the other thing I hate about this horrid planet – Gravity!” They were his last words before slamming into a dense primeval-looking forest.
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“Ouch!” Josiah stopped and rubbed his head full of dreadlocks then continued to push the grocery cart jam-packed with his life’s possessions.
To read the beginning of Traxin’s adventure click on Part One
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I loved this! I have no idea whether the alliteration was purposeful, but it worked. The words clicked and hissed through my head as I read so that I started whispering them to myself to hear the satisfying sounds.
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I would love to say that it was, but I am glad that you enjoyed it!! I did try to give a little flatness to Traxin’s voice…Thank you so much!!
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The idea of Josiah being boarded without even realizing it is awesome but yeah kinda makes your head itch. I love it. 🙂
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Justlyd – I love your term “boarded!” Hahaha! Thank you so much! I hope you come by to read again!
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Susie, I really like this piece!
My last adventure was when I started to blog a few short months ago, and it’s my coming adventure as well. It’s been a blast.
I actually thought I was following you already, and see that I haven’t been. I love your blog. I’m baaaaaack!
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Thank you so much MJ!
It is an amazing adventure with a fantastic cast of characters!!
Welcome back!
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That’s quite the zoom lens you have there!! Too funny and I’m off to read the first part of the story!!
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Thanks Just a Smidgen! I am glad you enjoyed the adventure. 😀
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I went out with a girl who bore an uncanny resemblance to Traxin. Loved it!
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Poor thing! Hahaha! Thanks for reading!!
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His yellow eye? As in only one? Very cool piece Susie! You really have a way with words. 🙂 I can visualize Traxin now. I love it when that happens.
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He is unique! Hahaha!
Thank you so much!
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Heh heh – nice piece! Maybe “insectoid” for “insect-like” and just “primeval” (without the “-looking”) would give you another two words to play with…
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Thank you so much!
Insectoid!!! Good one.
Thanks for the advice! I am always trying to pare it down as much as possible.
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I nominated you for the Kreative Blogger Award! Here’s the link.
http://modernmiracleme.wordpress.com/2012/01/14/kreative-blogger-award-1/
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Nice! Thank you so very much!!
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Lovely flash story!
They’re everywhere, the little Traxins, it seems to me for some reason… 😀
Thank you for reading!
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Thanks Norv! Those pesky little aliens could be flying around your yard right now!
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