For the beginning of Traxin’s adventures read Into the Vortex.
His second adventure is Crashing.
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“What’s that crazy-looking thing?” Tom plucked the insect-like space ship out of Josiah’s dreads and then flicked
it away.
Traxin, still rattled from the impact, regained control and shifted gear. One long strand of hair, tangled in the wing, created drag. He slammed the zevot into forward thrust. The powerful vessel gained altitude.
He peered through the portal and blinked his yellow eye. The mother ship (invisible to humans), had returned for him!
Then darkness swallowed the craft. Traxin sailed downward.
“NO! I want to get off this disgusting planet!”
The black crow spat the spacecraft into a hungry beak.
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Welcome #FridayFictioneers!
Post the link to your 100 word flash fiction story below in my comment section. Please take some time and read the other Fictioneer’s stories. They will be so happy that you stopped by!
Tweet me at @SusieLindau if you have any questions.
Madison Woods will be back next week to give out the photo prompt and host the #FridayFictioneers!
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Photo by Susie Lindau
Such a nice piece! I do feel for Traxin… crows are no fun. I cannot help thinking also that it means it’s not over though, the lovely adventure for us to join.
Thank you for making my day with the cute grey alien adventures.
I love that little alien. He has such a big attitude. I do think he survives the ordeal! Hahaha!
Thanks Norv!
I am loving this Traxin series you have going
Great work..
Wow! Was passing by and found your story so awesome, I remain arrested! Power to you. Shall remain here for more>
Cheers
Shakti
Still loving Traxin’s adventures
Keep up the awesome work, Susie!!
Here’s my one-week-late response to the prompt. Thanks for providing it, Susie! And for hosting.
http://thecolorlime.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/time-pause-play-rewind-101/
Thanks Hook! You can count on me!!
Another winner, Susie! Keep the cosmic hits coming!
Jump in and write one! Post it on Friday and add the link to Madison_Woods.com blog’s comment section. You are always welcome to post the link here in my comments on Fridays too!
Thank you!
I am glad to hear you are enjoying the little alien’s adventures! They are totally weird. I have been channeling old Mad Magazines! When Voyage to the Bottom of the Sea was on TV they did a whole series of take-offs with little people and their own voyages!
Before I went into comics a used to write short stories. I keep meaning to start again, but something always seems to come up and I loose my drive. Maybe a few 100 word stories would be a good way to get back in the game, as it were.
Re: this story, I’m enjoying it so far. It’s weird, and I like weird. But if Traxin’s bugship is anything like the one from Lexx, I pity that poor crow.
Awwww! Thank you so much Paul!! You really made my day!
Have a great weekend!
Invisible to humans? Well, how come I can see it..? Never mind, don’t answer that. I have a flower for you to post onto your wonderfully entertaining site if you would accept the “Reader Appreciation Award” you can read about, and collect the image @ my latest post. The rules are rather simple…pass it along to 6 of your faves( those whom have not previously received it) Link the image back to the conferrer, (that would be me)…list and link to the 6 recipients…Just in case you miss my latest post…you can pick the flower from my sidebar anytime. Bless You
paul
Here’s my second entry: http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/22/long-hauls/
I am calling it a day… will check everyone’s entries tomorrow!
Poor Traxin!
The things he has to go through!
Here’s my story I had posted earlier in the other post…
http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/destiny/
I am going to write one more 100 word story… too time pressed this weekend.. I will read all the stories here as and when I get some time to catch my breath!
Great prompt Susie!
I’m having trouble leaving comments. WordPress and Blogger aren’t playing nicely. Doug, well done!!! Here’s what I tried to left on your site twice but it didn’t “take”:
Well, now. I used to date a guy who could do that!
loved your entry and all the sultry innuendos.
http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.com
Thanks, Susie. Settings are changed. Hope everyone can comment now. http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com
Thanks, Susie. I changed my settings on Blogger. Hope more of you can comment now! http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com
Haha! You’re not tricking me into finding him in the picture this time. I love your Traxin stories! Flash fiction scares the jeepers out of me. 100 words? Are you kidding me? I’m good with 300,000, thanks.
Tameri, come on and take a walk on the wild side! Maybe one day, I’ll write a novel. For now, to me, it’s just WAY to much space in which to wander aimlessly.
Baby steps; baby steps.
You aren’t alone Tameri. A lot of people looked for Traxin in the video! : )
Thanks!
300,000? Wow that’s a lot of words!
I don’t have time at the moment but will definitely get into this fiction thing soon – you have inspired me!
I am so glad! It is a great exercise in concise writing. I usually write it out, check the word count and start editing!
I hope you will join in the fun!
Great photo, Susie. Liked the latest Traxin – nice twist with the hungry beaks!
Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-8y
(I think I posted it half asleep this morning on the wrong page:)
Thanks writingbothsides! His little craft resembles a bug after all…poor guy.
Great!
Whoops! I forgot that I was supposed to leave my link here also. I left mine on Madisons, but here is my story page: http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com
Well, looks as though I may have something SOMEWHAT (though not exactly) in common with a few of you, this time. Here’s my entry: http://wp.me/p24aJS-1P
Thanks Laura!
It’s not over for Traxin……Hahaha!
A story after my own rusty heart. Very well told, Susie. I feel sorry for the poor little spaceship’s pilot. But oh, well. Life is hard.
No, I’ve got the right one. I was editing it. Another friend said the same thing. Please recheck at http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com thanks!
It’s up! I wasn’t able to leave a comment. If you activate the name/url it takes WordPress users comments.
Here was my comment:
Great conversation! I loved your post. I do agree, it could be worse! Hahaha!
I’m enjoying his ongoing adventures very much. Poor little bug man.
Write on!
Thanks so much! He is a pretty fun character to write about!
These are so good. I’ll go back and read several more and comment. As usual, my take is totally different. Everyone else saw sails and flags while I saw windows! Read my story at http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.com/2012/01/flash-fiction-friday.html
You might have the wrong link. I am seeing last week’s story..
This was on another Blogger site without the Name/URL option, so it was not possible for me to leave a comment there.
From dreadlocks to crows, I like the view point very much. I wonder where he’ll go next.
Thanks Catherine! I have an idea, but we’ll see if he goes on any more adventures….
My two cents in 100 words.
http://yatinpatel.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/lens-or-lass-100-word-flash-fiction/
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Too awesome Susie!
Thanks Julie…poor Traxin…Hahaha!
Thank you for an especially challenging picture this week. I had so many chapters of Chicago Manual of Style to read for school tomorrow – I appreciated the break. And, I enjoyed reading this week…
~Susan
Great – Thanks!
Very Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy! I loved the books and of course the old PBS BBC version when I was a kid.
Thanks! I never caught that series, but I will now!
Cool continuation, Susie.
Here’s mine.
http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/01/silver-lining-100words-for.html
Siobhan
Thanks Siobhan!
Hi susie.
Thanks for the reminder to put the link to my story here -
http://mjshorts.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/land-ahoy-100-word-story-for-friday-fictioneers/
Here’s mine: http://www.susanwenzel.com/ I couldn’t get it just right this week though…too much homework detracted from my fun.
I’m headed out to read the others. Happy Flash Fiction Friday!
~Susan
Thanks!
Thanks Quill! I will click over and read yours now!
Susie, Oh no, Not the mothership! These adventures are so much fun to read.
This is my contribution for the week: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/shrouds/
I’ll begin reading right after lunch and coffee
Thanks for hosting this week, Susie. Great job with the story! The adventures of Traxin continue! I look forward to reading more.
Here is the link to mine. This week you get two stories for the price of one: the original flash and a second one in the comments section with an ‘alternate’ ending. Hope you enjoy at least one of them!
http://wp.me/pReXn-ec
Excellent!
Thanks~
That story is priceless Susie!
Thanks Wakefield!! Hahaha!
That is a great photo and thanks for hosting this week Susie.
The trio is back in “Major Change” 100 words from “Undeclared” http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/01/fridayfictioneers-major-change.html
Thanks Nelle! It is so weird for me to go back and forth from my WIP where I have a goal of 100,000 words! Hahaha!
Well done! You do a great job with short length stories…
Here is mine (hope it only comes through once…):
http://hugmore.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/past-present-a-friday-fictioneers-post/
Perfect!
Hurrah!
Poor guy got fed to the birds? Fun story, Susie. Thanks for hosting #FridayFictioneers this week.
Here’s my contribution: http://www.caramichaels.com/defiantlyliterate/2012/01/20/fridayfictioneers-012012/
He sure did! I am glad you got the ending….but is it the end of the poor little alien???
I look forward to reading your contribution!
Thanks for hosting Susie. Of course, now I’m afraid to go outside because I have not been vaccinated for Traxins. You have a wild imagination. Guess that goes with a wild ride.
Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/
Thanks Bridgesareforburning! It has been a little wild here today!!
A vaccination would be a great idea….I am heading over to read!
Hahaha! That’s for sure in Traxin’s case!
Yikes.. it is never good to be small:) We both thought crows today haha
HUGGGGGGGGGG
Poor Traxin! you certainly give him his fair share of adventures, but not necessarily pleasant ones. I didn’t have a problem with the hungry beak line – that worked for me fine, although I did have a few queries in my head about the mother ship. If you had more space I’m sure you’d explain that better though, so given that this is part of a larger story, I think it’s fine!
E
Thanks Elmo! I will check it out!
Hi Susie! thanks for hosting us. My contribution is here: http://wp.me/p1PeVl-2P
I’m going to read everyone’s now, starting with yours!
Elmo
Hi Susie & Fictioneers!
Like the post, Susie, very interesting take, loved the mini-space explorer. But like Carlos, I had a bit of trouble understanding the end. The mother ship and then the crow? I might need to come back and read it again after a second coffee. Good read.
here’s mine, just rattled it off.
http://cleveroldowl.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/friday-fictioneers-stormy-seas/
Happy friday,
I guess that is why I said it was “invisible to humans” that way it could be hovering right over NYC! Thanks for reading and commenting!
Oooh. I knew I missed something obvious. Hahahha.
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I love your premise of a tiny alien space ship and the humour inherent in the idea. There was a film 20 or so years ago, called Liquid Sky, that had the same premise, but a very, very different story, having a great deal to with sex and drugs. Your story, Like Lindaura’s is part of a larger whole and interesting because of it. I only wondered about the last line “The black crow spat the spacecraft into a hungry beak.” Whose beak? Is she feeding it to her young? It’s just a little bit of a leap to understand there, otherwise, perfect.
And thanks for depping for Madison; it must be very time-consuming!
Thanks Russell!
I will have to check out that film. It sounds really intriguing.
As far as the last line I knew that birds feed their young that way and yet my husband didn’t get it either so you are not alone!
Poor Traxin is having a tough day. Out of the frying pan into the fire, so to speak. I enjoyed the wild ride much more than he did.
Here’s mine http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/
Hey there Russell,
I don’t know why – but I have a real hard time leaving comments on blogspot – might be the security here at work. so here’s mine:
It does read like a cartoon, and I laughed, although maybe I worry about the choice of villain name, hahahha. Nicely done sir.
Thanks Russell! I laughed while I was writing it..
In your story, is his cape made from a paper napkin?
As with other WordPress users, it is impossible for me to leave a comment on your site unless you enable the “Username/URL” option. The OpenID/WordPress option of Blogger just doesn’t function correctly. Then again, it’s pretty well known that Blogger doesn’t play well with others.
Oh, no! Poor Traxin. Will he ever get home? I enjoyed your story once again, Susie. Great photo prompt – and thanks for hosting!
Here’s my link:
http://jansthoughtsovercoffee.blogspot.com/2012/01/flashfriday-fridayfictioneers-red-white.html
He still may have another adventure left in him! Hahaha! Thanks~
Hi Jan,
Like I said, blogspot and I are having a spt this morning. so:
Really smooth dialog, and a very cool idea. Great piece of writing.
Dang that blogspot! I keep threatening to move that blog to WordPress, but I’m chicken.
Someday I’ll work up the courage. Thanks for trying, Craig.
Craig, your story is really excellent this week, but I only found it in a roundabout way… I guess it’s all a bit roundabout this week. Anybody who hasn’t read Craig’s story go here:
http://cleveroldowl.wordpress.com/
Hey,
I just came back to see if there were any new stories to read and saw the above comment. Thanks Carlos. Very nice of you!
Perfection! Exactly what I look for in a well-written 100 word story.
Here’s mine: http://furiousfictions.blogspot.com/2012/01/this-weeks-fridayfictioneers-challenge.html
Thanks Joe!
hello Joe,
Liked the details in your piece, the dinner, and loved the last line – but don’t really understand how the narrator feel asleep while cooking dinner? or did I miss something?
Thanks Doug!
Just think they could be buzzing right by you right now!!
Dear Susie,
Very well done. Until I read your story I never stopped to think what a hazardous world this would be to the type of probes we humans send out to other worlds, especially if they’re small. Thanks for the new perspective, and for taking over the hosting duties this week.
Aloha,
Doug
Here’s the link to mine. Thanks for reading. D. http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/connection/
Here’s my submission for this week: Progress? http://bit.ly/xbM7X0 Hope you enjoy it. (It was a real challenge this week.)
Thanks Caerlynn!
Phooey! That was the wrong link (sorry!). Try this: http://penntonic.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/progress/.
Whew! Glad you posted a second link.
Enjoyed your story, and really like the name of your blog, too. Very clever!
You could start one here on WordPress and cross-post! I have several blogs…
Thanks Jan. Glad you like the story (and the blog name!). Appreciate your visit.