So Close and Yet – 100 Word Flash Fiction

For the beginning of Traxin’s adventures read Into the Vortex.

His second adventure is Crashing.

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“What’s that crazy-looking thing?” Tom plucked the insect-like space ship out of Josiah’s dreads and then flicked it away.

Traxin, still rattled from the impact, regained control and shifted gear. One long strand of hair, tangled in the wing, created drag. He slammed the zevot into forward thrust. The powerful vessel gained altitude.

He peered through the portal and blinked his yellow eye. The mother ship (invisible to humans), had returned for him!

Then darkness swallowed the craft. Traxin sailed downward.

“NO! I want to get off this disgusting planet!”

The black crow spat the spacecraft into a hungry beak.

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Welcome #FridayFictioneers!

Post the link to your 100 word flash fiction story below in my comment section. Please take some time and read the other Fictioneer’s stories. They will be so happy that you stopped by!

Tweet me at @SusieLindau if you have any questions.

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99 responses to “So Close and Yet – 100 Word Flash Fiction

  1. Such a nice piece! I do feel for Traxin… crows are no fun. I cannot help thinking also that it means it’s not over though, the lovely adventure for us to join. :)

    Thank you for making my day with the cute grey alien adventures.

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  2. I am loving this Traxin series you have going :) Great work..

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  3. Wow! Was passing by and found your story so awesome, I remain arrested! Power to you. Shall remain here for more>

    Cheers

    Shakti

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  4. Still loving Traxin’s adventures :) Keep up the awesome work, Susie!!

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  5. Here’s my one-week-late response to the prompt. Thanks for providing it, Susie! And for hosting.

    http://thecolorlime.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/time-pause-play-rewind-101/

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  6. Thanks Hook! You can count on me!!

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  7. Another winner, Susie! Keep the cosmic hits coming!

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  8. Jump in and write one! Post it on Friday and add the link to Madison_Woods.com blog’s comment section. You are always welcome to post the link here in my comments on Fridays too!

    Thank you!
    I am glad to hear you are enjoying the little alien’s adventures! They are totally weird. I have been channeling old Mad Magazines! When Voyage to the Bottom of the Sea was on TV they did a whole series of take-offs with little people and their own voyages!

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  9. Before I went into comics a used to write short stories. I keep meaning to start again, but something always seems to come up and I loose my drive. Maybe a few 100 word stories would be a good way to get back in the game, as it were.

    Re: this story, I’m enjoying it so far. It’s weird, and I like weird. But if Traxin’s bugship is anything like the one from Lexx, I pity that poor crow.

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  10. Awwww! Thank you so much Paul!! You really made my day!
    Have a great weekend!

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  11. Invisible to humans? Well, how come I can see it..? Never mind, don’t answer that. I have a flower for you to post onto your wonderfully entertaining site if you would accept the “Reader Appreciation Award” you can read about, and collect the image @ my latest post. The rules are rather simple…pass it along to 6 of your faves( those whom have not previously received it) Link the image back to the conferrer, (that would be me)…list and link to the 6 recipients…Just in case you miss my latest post…you can pick the flower from my sidebar anytime. Bless You
    paul

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  12. Here’s my second entry: http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/22/long-hauls/
    I am calling it a day… will check everyone’s entries tomorrow! :)

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  13. Poor Traxin!
    The things he has to go through! :)
    Here’s my story I had posted earlier in the other post…

    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/destiny/

    I am going to write one more 100 word story… too time pressed this weekend.. I will read all the stories here as and when I get some time to catch my breath! :)

    Great prompt Susie!

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  14. I’m having trouble leaving comments. WordPress and Blogger aren’t playing nicely. Doug, well done!!! Here’s what I tried to left on your site twice but it didn’t “take”:

    Well, now. I used to date a guy who could do that! :) loved your entry and all the sultry innuendos.

    http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.com

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  15. Thanks, Susie. Settings are changed. Hope everyone can comment now. http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com

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  16. Thanks, Susie. I changed my settings on Blogger. Hope more of you can comment now! http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com

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  17. Haha! You’re not tricking me into finding him in the picture this time. I love your Traxin stories! Flash fiction scares the jeepers out of me. 100 words? Are you kidding me? I’m good with 300,000, thanks.

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  18. I don’t have time at the moment but will definitely get into this fiction thing soon – you have inspired me!

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  19. Great photo, Susie. Liked the latest Traxin – nice twist with the hungry beaks!
    Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-8y
    (I think I posted it half asleep this morning on the wrong page:)

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  20. Whoops! I forgot that I was supposed to leave my link here also. I left mine on Madisons, but here is my story page: http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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  21. Well, looks as though I may have something SOMEWHAT (though not exactly) in common with a few of you, this time. Here’s my entry: http://wp.me/p24aJS-1P

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  22. Thanks Laura!
    It’s not over for Traxin……Hahaha!

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  23. A story after my own rusty heart. Very well told, Susie. I feel sorry for the poor little spaceship’s pilot. But oh, well. Life is hard.

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  24. No, I’ve got the right one. I was editing it. Another friend said the same thing. Please recheck at http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com thanks!

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    • It’s up! I wasn’t able to leave a comment. If you activate the name/url it takes WordPress users comments.

      Here was my comment:
      Great conversation! I loved your post. I do agree, it could be worse! Hahaha!

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  25. I’m enjoying his ongoing adventures very much. Poor little bug man.

    Write on!

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  26. These are so good. I’ll go back and read several more and comment. As usual, my take is totally different. Everyone else saw sails and flags while I saw windows! Read my story at http://banterwithbeth.blogspot.com/2012/01/flash-fiction-friday.html

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  27. From dreadlocks to crows, I like the view point very much. I wonder where he’ll go next.

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  28. Pingback: Lens or Lass – 100 Word Flash Fiction | Yatin's Random Thoughts

  29. Thank you for an especially challenging picture this week. I had so many chapters of Chicago Manual of Style to read for school tomorrow – I appreciated the break. And, I enjoyed reading this week…

    ~Susan

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  30. Very Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy! I loved the books and of course the old PBS BBC version when I was a kid.

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  31. Here’s mine: http://www.susanwenzel.com/ I couldn’t get it just right this week though…too much homework detracted from my fun.

    I’m headed out to read the others. Happy Flash Fiction Friday!

    ~Susan

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  32. Thanks Quill! I will click over and read yours now!

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  33. Susie, Oh no, Not the mothership! These adventures are so much fun to read.

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  34. This is my contribution for the week: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/shrouds/

    I’ll begin reading right after lunch and coffee :)

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  35. John Hardy Bell

    Thanks for hosting this week, Susie. Great job with the story! The adventures of Traxin continue! I look forward to reading more.

    Here is the link to mine. This week you get two stories for the price of one: the original flash and a second one in the comments section with an ‘alternate’ ending. Hope you enjoy at least one of them! :)

    http://wp.me/pReXn-ec

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  36. That story is priceless Susie!

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  37. That is a great photo and thanks for hosting this week Susie.

    The trio is back in “Major Change” 100 words from “Undeclared” http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/01/fridayfictioneers-major-change.html

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  38. Thanks Nelle! It is so weird for me to go back and forth from my WIP where I have a goal of 100,000 words! Hahaha!

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  39. Well done! You do a great job with short length stories…

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  40. Poor guy got fed to the birds? Fun story, Susie. Thanks for hosting #FridayFictioneers this week. :)

    Here’s my contribution: http://www.caramichaels.com/defiantlyliterate/2012/01/20/fridayfictioneers-012012/

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  41. Thanks for hosting Susie. Of course, now I’m afraid to go outside because I have not been vaccinated for Traxins. You have a wild imagination. Guess that goes with a wild ride.
    Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

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  42. Hahaha! That’s for sure in Traxin’s case!

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  43. Yikes.. it is never good to be small:) We both thought crows today haha
    HUGGGGGGGGGG

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  44. Poor Traxin! you certainly give him his fair share of adventures, but not necessarily pleasant ones. I didn’t have a problem with the hungry beak line – that worked for me fine, although I did have a few queries in my head about the mother ship. If you had more space I’m sure you’d explain that better though, so given that this is part of a larger story, I think it’s fine!
    E

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  45. Hi Susie! thanks for hosting us. My contribution is here: http://wp.me/p1PeVl-2P
    I’m going to read everyone’s now, starting with yours!
    Elmo

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  46. Hi Susie & Fictioneers!

    Like the post, Susie, very interesting take, loved the mini-space explorer. But like Carlos, I had a bit of trouble understanding the end. The mother ship and then the crow? I might need to come back and read it again after a second coffee. Good read.

    here’s mine, just rattled it off.

    http://cleveroldowl.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/friday-fictioneers-stormy-seas/

    Happy friday,

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  48. I love your premise of a tiny alien space ship and the humour inherent in the idea. There was a film 20 or so years ago, called Liquid Sky, that had the same premise, but a very, very different story, having a great deal to with sex and drugs. Your story, Like Lindaura’s is part of a larger whole and interesting because of it. I only wondered about the last line “The black crow spat the spacecraft into a hungry beak.” Whose beak? Is she feeding it to her young? It’s just a little bit of a leap to understand there, otherwise, perfect.
    And thanks for depping for Madison; it must be very time-consuming!

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    • Thanks Russell!
      I will have to check out that film. It sounds really intriguing.
      As far as the last line I knew that birds feed their young that way and yet my husband didn’t get it either so you are not alone!

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  49. Russell

    Poor Traxin is having a tough day. Out of the frying pan into the fire, so to speak. I enjoyed the wild ride much more than he did.

    Here’s mine http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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    • Hey there Russell,

      I don’t know why – but I have a real hard time leaving comments on blogspot – might be the security here at work. so here’s mine:

      It does read like a cartoon, and I laughed, although maybe I worry about the choice of villain name, hahahha. Nicely done sir.

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    • Thanks Russell! I laughed while I was writing it..

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    • In your story, is his cape made from a paper napkin? ;)

      As with other WordPress users, it is impossible for me to leave a comment on your site unless you enable the “Username/URL” option. The OpenID/WordPress option of Blogger just doesn’t function correctly. Then again, it’s pretty well known that Blogger doesn’t play well with others. :(

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  50. Oh, no! Poor Traxin. Will he ever get home? I enjoyed your story once again, Susie. Great photo prompt – and thanks for hosting!

    Here’s my link:

    http://jansthoughtsovercoffee.blogspot.com/2012/01/flashfriday-fridayfictioneers-red-white.html

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  51. Perfection! Exactly what I look for in a well-written 100 word story.

    Here’s mine: http://furiousfictions.blogspot.com/2012/01/this-weeks-fridayfictioneers-challenge.html

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  52. Thanks Doug!
    Just think they could be buzzing right by you right now!!

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  53. Dear Susie,

    Very well done. Until I read your story I never stopped to think what a hazardous world this would be to the type of probes we humans send out to other worlds, especially if they’re small. Thanks for the new perspective, and for taking over the hosting duties this week.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    Here’s the link to mine. Thanks for reading. D. http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/connection/

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  54. Caerlynn Nash

    Here’s my submission for this week: Progress? http://bit.ly/xbM7X0 Hope you enjoy it. (It was a real challenge this week.)

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