Just Another Day – 100 Word Flash Fiction

He felt as if he’d been frozen in time.

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“I’ve always had feelings for you Alfred, but…” Sophie pulled her soft hand from his. Her long blue skirt swished as she turned and strode away.

He stood from bended knee and bolted out of the Victorian homestead, then sprinted to the tracks.

There was nothing left for him now.  Alfred heard the rumble of an approaching train. He stepped onto the wooden platform as snowflakes fell in silent flurries soaking the shoulders of his gray wool coat.

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“Dude! Do you feel that cold spot? It’s about a hundred degrees today!”

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Have you ever felt an unexplained cold spot?

Have you ever gotten a vibe from a place you visited?

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When I found this video two weeks ago  it had 34,000 views. Now it has over 37,000,000!


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87 responses to “Just Another Day – 100 Word Flash Fiction

  1. It’s not the first time I stumble upon this story, but it was a pleasure to read as before. It’s like every word in it finds the perfect spot and builds the scene, it’s just right, and impressive.
    Thank you.

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  2. Beautiful… Heartbreaks are heavy burdens to carry…
    And that’s a lovely song!

    Here’s my late entry:

    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/30/grow-up-now/

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  3. It was a hot day in Boston when my friends and I felt a cool breeze coming from the side of a building. As we all fought for the sweet air, some guys walked by and hit on us. We all had a good laugh.

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  4. What a wonderful glimpse into the spirit world. I have a friend who would adore this drabble; I’m going to send her here to read it right away!

    Wonderful read, as always!

    The link to my drabble is: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/01/26/grounds/

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  5. That was pretty good, I guess. It was no red headed rodeo clown, but still good.

    Anyways, I was nominated for one of those blog awards things. I passed it along to you, so now you have to do it. Ha ha! You’re supposed to come up with seven facts about yourself and pass it along.

    http://badlandsbadley.wordpress.com/2012/01/29/i-guess-my-blog-is-lovely/

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  6. Absolutely! A long time ago I had taken a new job managing a property (there was an apartment attached to the office). As soon as I walked into that apartment I could feel a vibe. A couple days later I determined it had to be a bad vibe. I was restless. I couldnt get comfortable to save my life. I had nightmares constantly. Turns out that one of the previous women working there was raped. :( Ugh. How horrible. I didn’t stay there long. I couldnt handle the feeling because it was so intense. *sigh*

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  7. I have awarded you the Kreative Blogger Award! http://wp.me/p1QtlR-xU

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  8. You gave me a chill! Loved it Susie. I used to feel those kinds of cold spots around me when I would write. I’d have to bundle up.

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  9. Yes, ( swishing) long blue skirts always leave me train wrecked standing alone in a cold spot…funny you should mention it…lol, Swished….I love that…

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  10. Creepy in a good way! Very powerful.

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  11. That youtube video was actually on my front page of suggestions before I found you blog…now I know why! Thanks for sharing!

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  12. Bad circulation like mine! Hahaha! Good one~
    My feet got wrecked by years of ice skating after school while growing up in Wisconsin.
    Thanks for coming by to read~

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  13. Loved this.

    Now that you’ve explained walking through a cold spot, how do you explain the cold spot that follows my feet?

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  14. Love the twist in the story, and the last line gave me chills. Good one, Susie!

    Here’s mine:

    http://www.jansthoughtsovercoffee.blogspot.com/2012/01/flashfriday-fridayfictioneers-that-girl.html

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  15. Just another day, but not just another post!
    A truly awesome one!

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  16. Very well thought out…the last line caught me by surprise.

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  17. Dear Susie,

    That was a unique piece. The cold spot angle was out of the blue, yet very well rendered. Loved it.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  18. Madison Woods

    Oh I felt so bad for him. Did he just get rejected after he proposed to her? Great story! I loved the imagery you gave us, too.

    I have felt cold spots before and they always give me pause.

    And, I loved that music video.

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  19. Wow, that was a little intense! Good stuff, though.

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  20. Excellent Susie! Always love your Friday flashes! :-)

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  21. On the Plains of Abraham in Quebec City, yes. Such an important place in North American history, and you can feel it in the air.

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  22. Hi,
    A great story, I loved the throw in line at the end. Well done. :)

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  23. I often feel cold spots in my flat, I think I may have to get it exorcised. I ain’t afraid of no ghosts, but I am afraid of the bill for my central heating.

    I confess, the final line threw me for a second. Then I saw the tags and reality dawned. I can be a little slow on the uptake.

    Here’s my effort, posted at my old blog.

    http://jaykayel.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/my-first-time-100-word-flash-fiction/

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  24. Russell

    I love the way it comes full circle from the first sentence to the last few lines. It was very poetic. My favorite of the ones I’ve read so far today.

    here’s mine http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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  25. Very clever! What a huge story in so few words. :)

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  26. vina kent

    This was really great!

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  27. Well done. You very deftly grounded the different settings and made this work nicely. Good detail.

    Here’s mine:

    http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-8I

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  28. Picture & narration stirred up nostalgia in me … you are my idol in this version of expression … here’s mine for this week

    http://yatinpatel.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/trip-to-grandpas-100-word-flash-fiction/

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  29. Pingback: Trip to Grandpa’s – 100 Word Flash Fiction | Yatin's Random Thoughts

  30. John Hardy Bell

    I liked that, Susie. I thought I knew where it was going, then I was right. But then I wasn’t! :) Nice supernatural twist at the end! Yes, I have felt those cold spots, and yes they give me the creeps!

    Here is the link to my story: http://jhardyb.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/100-word-fridayfictioneers-8/

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  31. I’ve definitely felt unexplained cold. Just thinking of it gives me chills! ;)

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  32. this is beautiful, really interesting…

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  33. MM… what an interesting explanation for the cold spot. Beautiful.

    Also — I have a friend obsessed with that song and video. I’m pretty sure he’s contributed around 5,000 of the new hits. Haha.

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  34. Interesting take on the theme, and I love the discriptive elements that add to the picture, like the swish of her blue skirt.

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  35. Wow, Susie, you packed so much in this story, a proposal, a rejection, a suicide and a ghost. Great story!
    Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

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  36. Neat take on the “cold spot” idea – good job!
    Here’s my Friday piece:

    http://kbnelson.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/friday-flash-drip/

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  37. Another good one!
    Yes and Yes to your questions:
    I’ve experienced cold spots during brief moments of terror prior to resolution.

    As to ‘gotten a vib’ – During a drive across the southern Appalachian Mountains I felt a compelling urge or longing like I’d lived there before. It is the reason I chose the location for the beginning of my wip historical novel.
    Thanks again Susie :D

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    • Thank you Rich!
      I just got shivers again. These comments are great!

      That is so good that you recognized the importance of those feelings. I look forward to reading your book some day!

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  38. hmcmullin

    Great story. Love that twist at the end. I’ve felt that really icy hair-raising chill only once, but that was enough. And I felt enough vibes when I visited Westminster Abbey for the first time that I was ready to move in. I’ve never visited anyplace that made me feel so welcome and “I’ve been here before” – unfortunately we were on a tour and I couldn’t take time to explore and find out more about where the vibes were coming from.

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    • Thanks!
      Sounds like a flash back to a past life experience. I am very open minded and never rule anything out. You will definitely have to go back!!
      Thank you for sharing! Now I am experiencing shivers…

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  39. ooh, i like this! Creepy. :)
    I have felt cold spots.. *shudder*

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  40. A great story Susie.
    That final line certainly sent a chill down my back.
    Now & again I’ve had that cold shiver down my spine for no apparent reason. My Gran always described such moments as ‘Someone walking on my grave.” Used to scare the living daylights out of me as a child!

    Taking you up on your offer to post a link to my story in these comments, here it is:

    http://mjshorts.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/the-last-time-i-was-here-100-word-story-for-friday-fictioneers/

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  41. Yes my old house has many of them and I have photographed the orbs

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  42. I haven’t actually felt one of those. Kinda glad, I’m pretty sure it would freak me out lol

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  43. Great story. I love the chilling turning after the classic romance. Here is mine for this week:

    http://hugmore.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/painful-partings-a-friday-fictioneers-post/

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