He felt as if he’d been frozen in time.
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“I’ve always had feelings for you Alfred, but…” Sophie pulled her soft hand from his. Her long blue skirt swished as she turned and strode away.
He stood from bended knee and bolted out of the Victorian homestead, then sprinted to the tracks.
There was nothing left for him now. Alfred heard the rumble of an approaching train. He stepped onto the wooden platform as snowflakes fell in silent flurries soaking the shoulders of his gray wool coat.
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“Dude! Do you feel that cold spot? It’s about a hundred degrees today!”
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Have you ever felt an unexplained cold spot?
Have you ever gotten a vibe from a place you visited?
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When I found this video two weeks ago it had 34,000 views. Now it has over 37,000,000!
Fictioneers are welcome to leave their links in my comment section
Check out Madison Woods blog for more 100 Word Flash!
Click on photo for link
It’s not the first time I stumble upon this story, but it was a pleasure to read as before. It’s like every word in it finds the perfect spot and builds the scene, it’s just right, and impressive.
Thank you.
Thanks Norv! Maybe you should consider subscribing since you are my new super fan!
Beautiful… Heartbreaks are heavy burdens to carry…
And that’s a lovely song!
Here’s my late entry:
http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/30/grow-up-now/
I am glad you liked it!
I’ll check out yours~
It was a hot day in Boston when my friends and I felt a cool breeze coming from the side of a building. As we all fought for the sweet air, some guys walked by and hit on us. We all had a good laugh.
Very cool! Hahaha! I hope he was cute….Thanks for stopping by~
What a wonderful glimpse into the spirit world. I have a friend who would adore this drabble; I’m going to send her here to read it right away!
Wonderful read, as always!
The link to my drabble is: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/01/26/grounds/
Thanks Quill! I appreciate that!
That was pretty good, I guess. It was no red headed rodeo clown, but still good.
Anyways, I was nominated for one of those blog awards things. I passed it along to you, so now you have to do it. Ha ha! You’re supposed to come up with seven facts about yourself and pass it along.
http://badlandsbadley.wordpress.com/2012/01/29/i-guess-my-blog-is-lovely/
I was on the road coming back from Aspen last night. Thanks so much Nathan! This is such a nice surprise!
Congratulations to you as well~
Absolutely! A long time ago I had taken a new job managing a property (there was an apartment attached to the office). As soon as I walked into that apartment I could feel a vibe. A couple days later I determined it had to be a bad vibe. I was restless. I couldnt get comfortable to save my life. I had nightmares constantly. Turns out that one of the previous women working there was raped.
Ugh. How horrible. I didn’t stay there long. I couldnt handle the feeling because it was so intense. *sigh*
That is intense and a horrible vibe. I wouldn’t be able to stay there either!
I have awarded you the Kreative Blogger Award! http://wp.me/p1QtlR-xU
Thanks so much Debra!
You gave me a chill! Loved it Susie. I used to feel those kinds of cold spots around me when I would write. I’d have to bundle up.
Thanks Debra!
That is so cool – Really! (pun intended) It makes me wonder if what you were writing attracted them….
Yes, ( swishing) long blue skirts always leave me train wrecked standing alone in a cold spot…funny you should mention it…lol, Swished….I love that…
Thanks Paul! Somehow I knew you would! Hahaha! You are so funny! I bet you would be good at these….
Creepy in a good way! Very powerful.
I am glad you liked it Tameri!
Good one Susie!
Thanks Sheila!
That youtube video was actually on my front page of suggestions before I found you blog…now I know why! Thanks for sharing!
I love that video! I found it on Facebook and had to share!
Thanks for reading!
Bad circulation like mine! Hahaha! Good one~
My feet got wrecked by years of ice skating after school while growing up in Wisconsin.
Thanks for coming by to read~
Loved this.
Now that you’ve explained walking through a cold spot, how do you explain the cold spot that follows my feet?
Love the twist in the story, and the last line gave me chills. Good one, Susie!
Here’s mine:
http://www.jansthoughtsovercoffee.blogspot.com/2012/01/flashfriday-fridayfictioneers-that-girl.html
I am so glad Jan! Thanks!
Just another day, but not just another post!
A truly awesome one!
Thanks Hook! You are so sweet!
Very well thought out…the last line caught me by surprise.
Thanks Granny.
I have to tell you that your avatar just cracks me up every time I see it! So great!
Dear Susie,
That was a unique piece. The cold spot angle was out of the blue, yet very well rendered. Loved it.
Aloha,
Doug
Thanks Doug! I am so glad you understood it. I push the limits on trying to convey as much as possible within the word constraints…
Dear Susie,
So do I. You nailed it.
Aloha,
D.
Oh I felt so bad for him. Did he just get rejected after he proposed to her? Great story! I loved the imagery you gave us, too.
I have felt cold spots before and they always give me pause.
And, I loved that music video.
Yep! Thanks Madison.
They are a strange sensation….
I have contributed to many of those views on Youtube! Hahaha!
Wow, that was a little intense! Good stuff, though.
Thanks Marcia! I am all about intense…
Excellent Susie! Always love your Friday flashes!
Thanks Julie! That means a lot to me!!
On the Plains of Abraham in Quebec City, yes. Such an important place in North American history, and you can feel it in the air.
OOOh! I would love to go there some day Nelle!
Hi,
A great story, I loved the throw in line at the end. Well done.
Thanks Mag!
I wanted everyone to realize that he still haunted the place where he committed suicide, but of course had no memory of….
I often feel cold spots in my flat, I think I may have to get it exorcised. I ain’t afraid of no ghosts, but I am afraid of the bill for my central heating.
I confess, the final line threw me for a second. Then I saw the tags and reality dawned. I can be a little slow on the uptake.
Here’s my effort, posted at my old blog.
http://jaykayel.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/my-first-time-100-word-flash-fiction/
I am so glad that you joined in the fun!! I never thought of the heating bills that ghosts could be contributing to. Could be a great theme for one of your comic strips!!
I love the way it comes full circle from the first sentence to the last few lines. It was very poetic. My favorite of the ones I’ve read so far today.
here’s mine http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/
Awww! Thanks Russell!
I thought the word frozen would give the hint that he jumped in front of the train….
Very clever! What a huge story in so few words.
Thanks Catherine! This week I went for a long time span from beginning to ending….
This was really great!
Thanks Vina! I hope you will stop by again!
Well done. You very deftly grounded the different settings and made this work nicely. Good detail.
Here’s mine:
http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-8I
Thanks bothsides! I had to pack a lot in….thanks for leaving your link!
Picture & narration stirred up nostalgia in me … you are my idol in this version of expression … here’s mine for this week
http://yatinpatel.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/trip-to-grandpas-100-word-flash-fiction/
Thanks Yatin! You made my day~
I will be over soon to read…
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I liked that, Susie. I thought I knew where it was going, then I was right. But then I wasn’t!
Nice supernatural twist at the end! Yes, I have felt those cold spots, and yes they give me the creeps!
Here is the link to my story: http://jhardyb.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/100-word-fridayfictioneers-8/
I am so glad I twisted when you turned John! That is always my intention.
I’ve definitely felt unexplained cold. Just thinking of it gives me chills!
Some of these comments gave me chills!
Thanks for coming by to read August~
this is beautiful, really interesting…
Thanks Will! And Thank you for all the retweets!
MM… what an interesting explanation for the cold spot. Beautiful.
Also — I have a friend obsessed with that song and video. I’m pretty sure he’s contributed around 5,000 of the new hits. Haha.
Thanks!
Hahaha! I am laughing. I have contributed too!
Interesting take on the theme, and I love the discriptive elements that add to the picture, like the swish of her blue skirt.
Thanks Judee.
I was trying to establish a 100 year time span…I am glad you noticed!
Wow, Susie, you packed so much in this story, a proposal, a rejection, a suicide and a ghost. Great story!
Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/
You totally got it! Thanks so much!!
I will come over and read. I’ve been skiing all day, so I’m a bit behind….
Neat take on the “cold spot” idea – good job!
Here’s my Friday piece:
http://kbnelson.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/friday-flash-drip/
Thanks KB! I will check it out!
Like the ghost of a relationship. Beautiful and haunting!
Mine is here
http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/01/the-eyes-of-a-child.html
Another good one!
Yes and Yes to your questions:
I’ve experienced cold spots during brief moments of terror prior to resolution.
As to ‘gotten a vib’ – During a drive across the southern Appalachian Mountains I felt a compelling urge or longing like I’d lived there before. It is the reason I chose the location for the beginning of my wip historical novel.
Thanks again Susie
Thank you Rich!
I just got shivers again. These comments are great!
That is so good that you recognized the importance of those feelings. I look forward to reading your book some day!
Great story. Love that twist at the end. I’ve felt that really icy hair-raising chill only once, but that was enough. And I felt enough vibes when I visited Westminster Abbey for the first time that I was ready to move in. I’ve never visited anyplace that made me feel so welcome and “I’ve been here before” – unfortunately we were on a tour and I couldn’t take time to explore and find out more about where the vibes were coming from.
Thanks!
Sounds like a flash back to a past life experience. I am very open minded and never rule anything out. You will definitely have to go back!!
Thank you for sharing! Now I am experiencing shivers…
ooh, i like this! Creepy.
I have felt cold spots.. *shudder*
Thanks Darlene!
It is a weird sensation…
A great story Susie.
That final line certainly sent a chill down my back.
Now & again I’ve had that cold shiver down my spine for no apparent reason. My Gran always described such moments as ‘Someone walking on my grave.” Used to scare the living daylights out of me as a child!
Taking you up on your offer to post a link to my story in these comments, here it is:
http://mjshorts.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/the-last-time-i-was-here-100-word-story-for-friday-fictioneers/
Thanks Mike!
I remember hearing that expression. How very creepy when you think about it!
Yes my old house has many of them and I have photographed the orbs
They are everywhere Linda!
I haven’t actually felt one of those. Kinda glad, I’m pretty sure it would freak me out lol
I had a moment when my family was touring the Winchester House when I felt really woozy! It was very creepy…
Great story. I love the chilling turning after the classic romance. Here is mine for this week:
http://hugmore.wordpress.com/2012/01/27/painful-partings-a-friday-fictioneers-post/
Thanks Lou! I thought that it would be fun to have 100 years pass by in 100 words~
Glad you left your link!