The aroma of fresh pine began to wake her from a deep sleep, but she hung on to the tendrils of a hazy dream. If she opened her eyes it would slip away forever. The warm caress of memory pulled her back and she found herself in a dark forest. She was not alone.
The hunter was close by. Somehow the game had gotten out of control. She had wanted him to catch her like before and yet growing fear of a different outcome stood in her way. I don’t trust him.
The Winner!
He peered through the doorway. The hospital worker scrubbed floors with a mop while she remained in a coma. This time he’d gone too far.
That was the first ending I wrote, but wasn’t sure that readers would like the dark ending. Was I wrong or what? Thanks for voting. The results will help me with the completion of my rewrite!
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Hi Susie! Really liked the choose your ending. I thought the sinister one went with the tone of the rest of the piece.
Thanks Kecia! I am glad you liked this. I wasn’t sure anyone would play along, but many did!
These flash fictions are helping me with a book I working on. Knowing that readers like a little darkness will help me with my rewrite.
I hope you will stop by with a link on Wednesday!
This you already know dear Susie
I’ve nominated you for the Kreativ Blogger Award: http://spirativity.co.uk/2012/06/01/the-kreativ-blogger-in-i/
Thanks so much! You really made my day! Congrats to you as well…
Hi,
A brilliant idea letting us choose, I chose the beach scene, because it did bring on a smile.
Thanks so much and for reading them! I will have to go and check out how they are doing…..
I love the the fact you are letting people vote on possible endings. Brilliant! I can’t believe my choice isn’t winning.
It’s not over yet! I am so glad you liked the idea.
I wrote the dark ending first and then thought writing alternative humorous endings might be fun!
Thanks Debra!
Oh not only was the story superb I just loved the very idea of voting and letting us choose one…this is fun
it was tough all the three options were brilliant but after spending a lot of time and moving cursor over 1st and 3rd i finally chose the 1st option..yay to dark endings
That is so great! I a wrote a paranormal fiction and although it has it’s light funny spots it will get dark too. (in the middle of a rewrite). Blogging does help to see what readers enjoy.
Thanks so much for the input Soma!
Wow! I love this. And allowing us to choose is brilliant. Must confess, I couldn’t vote for that youtube ending. That stuff spooks me, even in fiction.
I know what you mean and it is especially creepy since she has no idea.
Thanks so much Cayman! This, you could vote for…. *wink*
I ended up voting for the ending which is currently running first.
Loved it Susie – as we live in democracies i will keep my vote to myself for the time being (it was #3 by the way). Enjoy the weekend!
Hahaha! You crack me up Jim! I hope your weekend is “hideous” too!
“The warm caress of memory pulled her back …”
I love that line! I went with ‘a’… I love the dark feel.
Thanks Veronica! I’m so glad you read and voted! Have a fabulous weekend!
Great stuff!
The ride was hideous!
Oh, thank you anonymous! You must have read my “hideous” post! I hope you are spreading the word, literally…
Thanks JM!
great tease… now which do you choose?
Such a great question. They are all my babies after all!
three different endings for three different personalities… which way does your mood blow? Much fun and very creative..
You’re right about the different moods. Thanks!
Come back next Wednesday for Use Me and Abuse Me Day II !! That will be a really fun party. I have to rest up over the weekend…..
Im sure many have said this already but i will too, love how we get to choose the ending, the story engages you even more that way. First ending for me aswell.
I am glad you jumped in and voted! Thanks for stopping by.
I hope you’ll join me next week for another Use Me and Abuse Me day! Talk about interactive fun. Well you will love it!
Im looking forward to it susie.
First choice: Too grim, and I’m just not in a dark mood today – But I was was making the choice monday morning at work, things might be different…
Second choice: Score!!! Makes me smile and feel nostalgic, cause I’ve done it before!
Extra fun when when subject is sleeping on stomach with no strings attached… Hee! Hee! Hee! 
Third Choice: Nah, that’s just too mean – even for a monday morning at work. At least 1st victim is in coma and not feeling anything, and 2nd victim will jump up hopping mad, but she’ll soon get over it… But wide open mouthed snoring on youtube viral video??? The humiliation could last for years, and she might never get over the shame! Sub that one out to the Marquis Du Sade, or maybe the president of a college fraternity, cause that’s their kind of gig… not mine!
Excuse double clutch on “was was” WTF Chris??? Spell check betrays me once again!
So funny! I love your break down of the options. You could be my “color guy” for my blog like they have in sports!
Hey, once ya go Black, ya never… Uhm… wait a minute, OK – now I’m with ya! As in sports commentator and not majority of guys playing pro sports! (said with respect, of course) LOL
Interesting Susie… I went with the more sinister outcome as I could feel a little bit of revenge coming on. However, according to the results so far, it isn’t the most popular choice!
I haven’t checked in a while. We’ll see how it goes over the weekend. It could be a tight race! Thanks for reading and voting!
It is tied now in first! Don’t worry. I won’t do a play-by-play all weekend….
Story was a good lead-in to choice C. I’d love to write flash fiction but my brain overthinks the story and I wind up writing a story that probably won’t end.
That’s the fun of having a limit. It is a glimpse into a story… I am considering expanding on some of them for a short story book!
Thanks Tom!
That’s lovely and poetic Susie and fab that we get to choose the ending, how fun!
I am so glad you enjoyed it! I got the idea yesterday when I wrote the dark first ending…
Thanks Catherine and have a lovely weekend!
This was a fun one! I like interactive stories.
Thanks Katie. I am glad you joined in the fun!
Gotta go Viral! Have a Wonderful Weekend:)
Thanks Renee. You too!
When will you let us know what won gold, silver and bronze? Clearly psyching myself up for the summer Olympics over here. And yes, I voted.
I like the Olympic correlation! I will have to announce it on Monday…I am sure you will be on the edge of your seat all weekend!
You already know me TOO well, Susie!
NYC is such a dull place to live….I am sure my blog post takes a high priority!
Well done and love the voting bit..
HUGGGGGGGGGGG
Thanks Linda!
Ha – I voted, and the results show you have a 3 way tie. Can’t wait to see how you get out of that one!
It’s still early and I haven’t voted! It would be like voting for a favorite child…not really… Hahaha!
lol, I choose the last one,….
Hahaha! I could see him tormenting her on a road trip with his surprise recordings and it seeping into her dreams. Thanks Will!
I chose number 1 but all were very good!
Thanks Darla! Have a really “hideous” June 1st day!
I like this idea! I chose three, purely because I’m tempted to do the same whenever I see my mother asleep. She’d kill me, but it would be worth it!
I won’t post a link to mine yet, as it hasn’t been written or even conceived yet. I’ll be back with that later.
You have a bit of the devil in yah Jake. Hahaha! Hey, so do I or I wouldn’t have thought of it…
Post away after you write your flash-
Thanks! I am glad you stopped by!
My entry as promised! A tad late, but better late than never!
http://jaykayel.wordpress.com/2012/06/02/false-alarm-100-word-flash-fiction/
By the way, would you consider it bad form to vote again from this account? I hope not, ‘cos I just did.
Three good endings… and all different. I choose #1, although I would have left off the last line.
#2 was my second choice… you are a clever girl.
Thanks Ted! I came up with the first one and then thought it was a little dark for the first day in June so I wrote the alternative endings….
Like the thriller in the fiction, I’d like to end it with a humor
It is a fun twist! Thanks for reading Yatin!
Very nice to choose the ending, the last two made me laugh. There is something about Flash Fiction starting with sleep and waking to the smell of something good….. Happy Friday =)
Thanks JJ! I hope you have a fantabulous weekend full of wonderful aromas!
lmao… I can’t decide between the last two!
I am glad I could start your day with a giggle!
Sounds like a suspense novel.
Thanks John! Did you vote?
Oh yah, chose the first ending.
My husband liked the dark dramatic ending too!