He traced his finger along her curves, only stopping to admire her strength and beauty. They fit together like tailored leather. Her opalescent skin, like pewter in the moonlight, gave the false impression of being as malleable as mercury, but a steely inner strength resonated from her core.
It was dangerous, yet the risk excited him.
He slipped inside and adrenaline filled him with a thrilling rush. He threw her into high gear and never looked back even though he knew they’d been found. He didn’t want it to end.
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“It makes me sad to see a work of art like that wrapped around a tree.” The officer took notes as steam rose from the crumpled Jaguar.
“What about the carjacker?” asked the coroner.
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This is my entry for K8edid’s Seven Deadly Sins Contest. Yep. You guessed it. This week’s sin is lust. What a great time to jump into the action!
Have you ever been seduced by a material item? Maybe it was a coveted lunch box.
I would love to hear from you!
her strength and beauty. They fit together like tailored leather.
Great simile. The creation thereof hooks me to read more and I save them on 3×5 cards from all I read.
Wow! Thanks so much. That is very cool Carl! I just wrote another.
Strong opening… should’ve realised it was a set-up for a classic Susie switcheroo
Thanks so much Will!
Hahaha! Love it. “A classic Susie switcheroo..” I am trying to include them in the book I am writing!
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you’ve been awfully “quiet”..thanks for popping into my blog and pressing the like button.
I have been on vacation and hoped to keep up, but our internet box went on the fritz! I have some catching up to do!
Once read a story about how a cigarette was molested. But you turned this one around right at the end. Loved it.
A molested cigarette! Hahaha! I bet it was great.
Thanks so much Stelios!
If I come across it again, I’ll forward it.
I would love to read it!
I loved this!! I was thinking that I was about to read another 7 Shades of Gray:D and thought you were doing a better job than the E L James! Much, much better!! Great “spin” on the ending (couldn’t resist a bad pun).. xx
Spin! Hahaha! Good one.
Wow! Thanks so much Barbara!
I’ve been on vacation since I blogged this and had no internet. I have some catching up to do today!
I’ve never been seduced by a material item, aside from cosmetics. Love the hot gnarly kiss of mystery that led me on here, nicely played.
Cosmetics??? You are quite the metrosexual Cayman! Hahaha! Love your metaphor-hot gnarly kiss of mystery.. nice!
Wow. I think I need a cigarette, and a cold shower. Granted, that’s not the most workable combination in the world. So it’s probably a good thing that I don’t smoke or have a shower!
Just to clarify, I mean an actual shower, not the act of showering itself. Although from a technical point of view, I suppose both interpretations are accurate.
Hahaha! I am glad I got your motor running!
Fabulous metaphor Susie! Good luck
Thanks Catherine! I appreciate that coming from the metaphor queen!
Wow! Like “Fifty Shades of Grey” and “Crash” (The Cronenberg version!) all-in-one!
Yep and he died in a fiery climax! Hahaha!
I love a good throw blanket to cuddle with – ha:) Great Post – Have a Great Weekend!
Well there you go! Thanks Renee!
Oh that was soooo good! Definitely surprised me. Hope his pleasure was worth it. Lol.
I think he died with a smile on his face! Hahaha! Thanks Angela.
“He slipped inside…” got me all excited until your reveal. Then the ending! Nice job.
Thanks! I thought I could “slip” that one by you! Hahaha!
Susie Q! I just read this over on Katy’s blog earlier. I honestly think this is my favorite flash fiction yet. Nope. Don’t think. KNOW.
Wow and awwww! You made my day Jules! Did you enter?
I did, but I waited until the 11th hour, LOL I kept starting different drafts over the past few weeks, and of course wound up going with the first one.
Yours was SO. GOOD. I read all of the entries today (that were up so far); Katy has got her work cut out for her!
Wow!! Thanks so much Jules! We are visiting family and have really sketchy internet, so I haven’t read any of them yet. I am sure yours is fantastical!
Oooh! Great entry! Love it. Love K8tydid’s contests, too. Clever, she is.
Thanks Renee! She is a new friend so this is the first contest for me. I did see Darla’s sporty plaid jacket after she won it in the Peanut Butter Cup contest. I don’t even know what the prizes are in this contest. I hope it’s a Jaguar!
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Har love it… particularly love your first paragraph description.
Thanks Nelle! I was going to start the story out as a dream sequence and it sort of evolved…
awesomeness…. you tease
Busted! I am a big tease! Thank so much for that!
Great piece. And yes, I’ve been seduced, and twice it’s been by Jags!;-)
Dang Jags! It happens every time! Hahaha! Thanks so much Ray.
Okay, it’s true I had to read it twice – you really had me with the ‘seduction’. Nicely done.
Thanks Janet! I am glad that I got you with this one!
Very sneaky, making me think that the story was about seduction. It turns out to be an insight into the male brain. How many times have I had thoughts of kidnapping an XKE or Shelby Mustang only to be reminded of the long term relationship I have with my PT Cruiser.
Hahaha! I know what you mean. I am a Toyota girl myself.
I’m glad I “seduced” you into believing it was about sex!
Thanks Tom!
Flash and fiction. Yup. Nailed it. I got engrossed because of such exquisite narrating adjectives. Impressed that you gave your descriptions something to sit on! Great job and good luck with the compy. I was seduced by Where the red fern grows as a child with no money at a book fair. I stole that thing and got busted so quickly. The irony was the book and its lessons imbued me with a sense of hard work to accomplish my wants and there is always a way to achieve without stealing. Again, thanks for the post!
That is sooooo ironic! Hahaha! We do live and learn That would actually make a great short story!
Thanks so much for your generous comment! I am really trying to hone my skills at moving a story along at a brisk pace and describing with as few words as possible. It’s no wonder I am finding it hard to hit 100.000 words in my book!
He slipped inside and adrenaline filled him with a thrilling rush. He threw her into high gear and never looked back even though he knew they’d been found. He didn’t want it to end. – I figured this one out in advance. I am getting to know you too well…and I like it!
I let the clues start rolling. At least the title didn’t give it away! That would have really spoiled the fun! Thanks Michael!
Excellent! Double surprise.
Thanks! I am glad I fooled you twice!
Takes a lot to do that.
You got me there Susie – I thought it was gonna be Sci Fi – The Jag was made 40 miles from my home (pointless fact – but hey the sun is out!)
I didn’t know that! I went to a girl’s night out last Friday and a Jag was parked out in front. I wondered who the fancy-like person was at the party. When I was leaving, my friend Barb opened the door to the car. Whoa! She said it was her “50th” birthday present from her husband. He must have had a good year on the stock market! I would go test driving and that would be a close as I would get to ever “having” one!
Well written!
Thanks so much! That means a lot!
Ooh! What a lusty story, Susie. Well done! I am really not liking my competition with this contest now…I don’t have much of a chance.
I wouldn’t say that! I haven’t read them yet, but you are a fabulous writer!
Thanks so much Darla!
lust… excellent flash fiction yet again Susie! I moment of moments you always share
Thanks Barry. It was a fun one! It is definitely easier with some sort of theme in mind.
Definitely! I think my next post will be themed on good lusting!
Ooooooh! I can’t wait to see what you come up with!
Susie, this was great…but could you copy and paste it in the submission box over on my blog so I can include it with the other submissions for the judges to consider…unless you just wanted to post it here and not have it in the contest. Totally up to you.
I look forward to seeing more of these from you -
I was planning on it. Thanks K8edid!
Oooh! You’re really good at this! Excellent work, I thoroughly enjoyed it – good luck in the competition!
Thanks so much CC! I really appreciate that! Fingers crossed!
Nice job of taking the joy out of that ride!
Hahaha! I smacked it right upside the head…against a tree no less! Thanks V!
Cool. I’m with John, thought it was going to be hot, steamy and short!
No wonder you do these, you’re so good.
Awww. Thanks Lilie! You made my day! I love the flash fiction as an exercise. I love to see “how far I can go…” Hahaha!
Susie brilliant …one of your best…oh yes i have lusted after a beautiful antique wall mirror…beauty that she was and the price was music..had to bring her home..
Good for you! I have had my antique lusts as well. Some I purchased and others out of reach….
Thanks so much Soma and have a fantabulous weekend!
I love stories with twists! Great one, Susie.
And we must be on the same wavelength. I’m talking material object love on my blog, too. What are the chances?!? I think it means something cool. Hmm…
Something like “we are just cool like that!” Actually K8edid has a contest going on about lust that I had wanted to enter, hence my “lusty” tale!
Thanks August! My flashes are always twisted and this time literally! Hahaha!
Thought this was the start of a lover’s novel!
That would be a great way to hook a reader! Hahaha! Thanks John!
Great story! You had me thinking one thing until I got to the end.. very well done, Susie!
I fooled my mom and my daughter. Courtney said she wondered why I was having her read such a steamy story! Hahaha! Thanks Darlene!
Fantastic!
Thanks so much and have a great weekend JM!
Once again I leave a very satisfied reader.This is GREAT interpretation of lust.
To answer your question..yes a pair of camel colored leather gloves. I left them in the back of a cab in 1989 and I was seriously considering posting a picture of them on a milk carton. They were never found, even after my thorough investigation.
A milk carton! Good one. Hahaha.
Thanks so much! I think we have all been there with obsessing about something.
This sounds like my fave movie Crash with James Spader not the other Crash. Actually he would have gotten off on the damage hahah
HUGGGGGGGG
I think you are right! Hahaha! Thanks Linda.
Yeah, I’d be more upset about the car damage than the thief’s damage too.
Excellently crafted piece!
Hahaha! Lust can get a person in all kinds of trouble. I feel sorry for the guy who owned the car.
Thanks El Guapo!