The Art of Seduction – Flash Fiction

He traced his finger along her curves, only stopping to admire her strength and beauty. They fit together like tailored leather. Her opalescent skin, like pewter in the moonlight, gave the false impression of being as malleable as mercury, but a steely inner strength resonated from her core.

It was dangerous, yet the risk excited him.

He slipped inside and adrenaline filled him with a thrilling rush. He threw her into high gear and never looked back even though he knew they’d been found. He didn’t want it to end.

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“It makes me sad to see a work of art like that wrapped around a tree.” The officer took notes as steam rose from the crumpled Jaguar.

“What about the carjacker?” asked the coroner.

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This is my entry for K8edid’s Seven Deadly Sins Contest. Yep. You guessed it. This week’s sin is lust. What a great time to jump into the action!

Have you ever been seduced by a material item? Maybe it was a coveted lunch box.

I would love to hear from you!

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86 responses to “The Art of Seduction – Flash Fiction

  1. her strength and beauty. They fit together like tailored leather.

    Great simile. The creation thereof hooks me to read more and I save them on 3×5 cards from all I read.

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  2. Strong opening… should’ve realised it was a set-up for a classic Susie switcheroo ;)

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  4. unfetteredbs

    you’ve been awfully “quiet”..thanks for popping into my blog and pressing the like button.

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  5. Stelios

    Once read a story about how a cigarette was molested. But you turned this one around right at the end. Loved it.

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  6. I loved this!! I was thinking that I was about to read another 7 Shades of Gray:D and thought you were doing a better job than the E L James! Much, much better!! Great “spin” on the ending (couldn’t resist a bad pun).. xx

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  7. I’ve never been seduced by a material item, aside from cosmetics. Love the hot gnarly kiss of mystery that led me on here, nicely played.

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  8. Wow. I think I need a cigarette, and a cold shower. Granted, that’s not the most workable combination in the world. So it’s probably a good thing that I don’t smoke or have a shower!

    Just to clarify, I mean an actual shower, not the act of showering itself. Although from a technical point of view, I suppose both interpretations are accurate.

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  9. Fabulous metaphor Susie! Good luck

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  10. Wow! Like “Fifty Shades of Grey” and “Crash” (The Cronenberg version!) all-in-one!

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  11. I love a good throw blanket to cuddle with – ha:) Great Post – Have a Great Weekend!

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  12. Oh that was soooo good! Definitely surprised me. Hope his pleasure was worth it. Lol.

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  13. “He slipped inside…” got me all excited until your reveal. Then the ending! Nice job.

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  14. Susie Q! I just read this over on Katy’s blog earlier. I honestly think this is my favorite flash fiction yet. Nope. Don’t think. KNOW.

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  15. Oooh! Great entry! Love it. Love K8tydid’s contests, too. Clever, she is.

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    • Thanks Renee! She is a new friend so this is the first contest for me. I did see Darla’s sporty plaid jacket after she won it in the Peanut Butter Cup contest. I don’t even know what the prizes are in this contest. I hope it’s a Jaguar!

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  17. Har love it… particularly love your first paragraph description.

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  18. unfetteredbs

    awesomeness…. you tease

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  19. Ray

    Great piece. And yes, I’ve been seduced, and twice it’s been by Jags!;-)

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  20. Okay, it’s true I had to read it twice – you really had me with the ‘seduction’. Nicely done.

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  21. Very sneaky, making me think that the story was about seduction. It turns out to be an insight into the male brain. How many times have I had thoughts of kidnapping an XKE or Shelby Mustang only to be reminded of the long term relationship I have with my PT Cruiser.

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  22. Flash and fiction. Yup. Nailed it. I got engrossed because of such exquisite narrating adjectives. Impressed that you gave your descriptions something to sit on! Great job and good luck with the compy. I was seduced by Where the red fern grows as a child with no money at a book fair. I stole that thing and got busted so quickly. The irony was the book and its lessons imbued me with a sense of hard work to accomplish my wants and there is always a way to achieve without stealing. Again, thanks for the post!

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    • That is sooooo ironic! Hahaha! We do live and learn That would actually make a great short story!
      Thanks so much for your generous comment! I am really trying to hone my skills at moving a story along at a brisk pace and describing with as few words as possible. It’s no wonder I am finding it hard to hit 100.000 words in my book!

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  23. He slipped inside and adrenaline filled him with a thrilling rush. He threw her into high gear and never looked back even though he knew they’d been found. He didn’t want it to end. – I figured this one out in advance. I am getting to know you too well…and I like it!

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  24. Excellent! Double surprise.

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  25. You got me there Susie – I thought it was gonna be Sci Fi – The Jag was made 40 miles from my home (pointless fact – but hey the sun is out!)

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    • I didn’t know that! I went to a girl’s night out last Friday and a Jag was parked out in front. I wondered who the fancy-like person was at the party. When I was leaving, my friend Barb opened the door to the car. Whoa! She said it was her “50th” birthday present from her husband. He must have had a good year on the stock market! I would go test driving and that would be a close as I would get to ever “having” one!

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  26. Ooh! What a lusty story, Susie. Well done! I am really not liking my competition with this contest now…I don’t have much of a chance.

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  27. lust… excellent flash fiction yet again Susie! I moment of moments you always share :)

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  28. Susie, this was great…but could you copy and paste it in the submission box over on my blog so I can include it with the other submissions for the judges to consider…unless you just wanted to post it here and not have it in the contest. Totally up to you.

    I look forward to seeing more of these from you -

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  29. Oooh! You’re really good at this! Excellent work, I thoroughly enjoyed it – good luck in the competition!

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  30. Nice job of taking the joy out of that ride!

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  31. Cool. I’m with John, thought it was going to be hot, steamy and short!
    No wonder you do these, you’re so good.

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  32. Susie brilliant …one of your best…oh yes i have lusted after a beautiful antique wall mirror…beauty that she was and the price was music..had to bring her home..

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  33. I love stories with twists! Great one, Susie. :) And we must be on the same wavelength. I’m talking material object love on my blog, too. What are the chances?!? I think it means something cool. Hmm…

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    • Something like “we are just cool like that!” Actually K8edid has a contest going on about lust that I had wanted to enter, hence my “lusty” tale!
      Thanks August! My flashes are always twisted and this time literally! Hahaha!

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  34. Thought this was the start of a lover’s novel! :)

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  35. Great story! You had me thinking one thing until I got to the end.. very well done, Susie!

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  36. Once again I leave a very satisfied reader.This is GREAT interpretation of lust.
    To answer your question..yes a pair of camel colored leather gloves. I left them in the back of a cab in 1989 and I was seriously considering posting a picture of them on a milk carton. They were never found, even after my thorough investigation.

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  37. This sounds like my fave movie Crash with James Spader not the other Crash. Actually he would have gotten off on the damage hahah
    HUGGGGGGGG

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  38. Yeah, I’d be more upset about the car damage than the thief’s damage too.
    Excellently crafted piece!

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