Traxin retracted his periscopic neck and braced himself for impact as his insect-like ship spiraled through the atmosphere. He strained his yellow eye while staring through the portal desperate to stabilize the shaking craft. It rose to the peak of ascension, hesitating for a split second before plummeting towards Earth.
Above the engine’s roar Traxin shouted, “That is the other thing I hate about this horrid planet – Gravity!” They were his last words before slamming into a dense primeval-looking forest.
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“Ouch!” Josiah stopped and rubbed his head full of dreadlocks then continued to push the grocery cart jam-packed with his life’s possessions.
To read the beginning of Traxin’s adventure click on Part One
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‘dense primeval-looking forest’ ‘dreadlocks’ love it!
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As soon as John sent him flying through the air (in the first episode), I knew he had to land in dreadlocks! Hahaha!
Josiah is one of my son’s favorite names…
Thanks for reading~
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Very funny piece. Combines brevity, fantasy, and humor, and has a “kick” at the end! Reminds me of the old “Through Times and Space With Ferdinant Feghoot” short-short stories that used to appear in the SF mags of the 60s and 70s. (See ‘The Collected Feghoot” at http://www.amazon.com/Collected-Feghoot-Grendel-Briarton/dp/1561464252/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1325857950&sr=1-1.)
My latest short-short can be found here: http://joelerner.blogspot.com/2012/01/0420.html
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Thanks Joe! I will check it out!
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Dear Susie,
Loved your story, periscopic neck and all. When I read ‘peak of ascension’ I immediately substituted the word ‘apogee’. How do I find out more about Traxin?
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks Doug.
To read more about him, you can read the first chapter from last week. It is linked above!
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This kind of ties in with that little flying buy we wrote about last week. Great story. It made my scalp itch.
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It was part II.
Thanks!
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You could write a whole book. I recognized the scalp and hair.:) Yikes good thing I have not had breakfast yet..:)
HUGGGGGGGGGG
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Thanks Linda! That is the plan although I am not sure Traxin would be in it!! Hahaha!
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Lov’n this Traxin series. So tell us, how long will you keep this going? Has a certain ET element to it 🙂
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I will probably switch to something else next week since Jan Morrill is hosting the Fiction group unless…… Then I host the week after and have to provide a photo!! It will be fun!
The little guy may reappear….
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Love it! lol. So much personality in that tiny space. Gravity…it’s a killer lol
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Thanks Melinda! Hahaha!
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Hmmm- dreadlocks. There must be a lot of flaky snow everywhere also. (o:
~Pattie
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Hahaha! I bet there is!
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I get it…Traxin is a metaphor for Big Pharma and Josiah represents Everyman. Dreds represent Everyman’s wallet, Periscopic neck represents Big Pharma’s R&D divisions, and the insect like craft their marketing divisions. How am I doing? When the craft crashes into the Dreds, Everyman cries, “Ouch!”
I just started putting some flash on my blog if you care to peruse. My wife thinks its scary, but I just think its delectable. M.A.B.
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You are so dead on!!! Amazing!! Great minds and all…Hahaha! You will have to join our group!
I will check out your flash~
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Hi Susie! 🙂 I enjoy reading about Traxin’s adventures 😀 “dense primeval-looking forest” = “dreadlocks” lol I love it!
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Thanks so much! You never know what kind of trouble he is going to get into!!
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“That is the other thing I hate about this horrid planet – Gravity!”
Very funny!
In the words of Sheldon Cooper ( Big Bang Theory TV Series) – “Oh Gravity, Thou art a heartless Bitch!” lol!
Love the way you kept the connect between the posts! Good work!
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Thanks Parul! I love that show!! Hahaha!
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Ah, Susie. So good to be reading your work again. It never, ever disappoints! I was creeped out one second, laughing the next. Only great ones can do that! And you are a great one! 🙂
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I second John’s comment.
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Thanks so much Just One Lime!
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Wow John! That is sooo nice of you to say. Thank you so much!
I am so glad that you are back!
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Hope Traxin is equipped with GPS to navigate out form the dreadlocks of primeval forest.
Depending upon what landing gears Traxin is equipped with I can suggest two alternatives for future safe landings…
1) My History teacher’s shiny scalp, if runway if required …
2) If an air sac like structure is required for a soft plunge down landing, nothing’s better than air headed politicians.
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Hahaha! Yatin you crack me up!!! I will pass that on to the little alien!!
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I’m really enjoying the adventures of Traxil, Susie, LOL. It makes me laugh that their tragedies go fairly unnoticed in the world where they’ve crashed!
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Thanks Madison! They blast around Earth unnoticed by most people! Hahaha!
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Apparently, there were a whole huge fleet of Traxins, because I too have been crashed into. Lovely story, highly imaginative, and loved the ending. You deserve the Language Wizard merit badge for this one.
Here’s a link to mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/
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Cool! Thanks!!
So sorry about your head….Hahaha!
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Great selection for a song. My last adventure was in Loray Caverns, Virginia. I want to go skydiving in New Zealand next.
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Nice choices!!
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I say, I say bwoy…”Squashk” get thee out of my corn rows…
Foghorn Leghorn
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Hahaha! Poor Traxin!!
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A poet, blogger, cutie pie AND fangirl author capable of weaving sci-fi goodness?
You’re everything in one smiling package, aren’t you Susie?
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Wow! Thanks Hook! You made my day!!!
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I missed it completely at first, but thanks to more astute readers I get it now and it’s great.
Here’s mine:
http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-7H
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Thanks! I am glad I had you scratching your head like Josiah! Hahaha!
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I like! I like! Very nice quick action piece. Love!
If I could go anywhere it would be Italy. 🙂
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Thanks so much!
I may get a chance to go there next fall! I have only been to Europe once and that was 11 years ago.
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I love your story! You are brilliant, please keep them coming!
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Awww! Thanks for stopping by to read and subscribing!! I love forward to more recipes on your blog as well!
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This is fantastic! Only a very talented writer with a vivid imagination could string something like this together. Great job and I look forward to more of Traxin’s adventures! Even though this piece leaves me itchy 🙂
Thanks for stopping by the other day!
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Thanks Charlotte! You are so nice to say that. I am actually thinking of using your name for one of my characters in the book I am writing. I look forward to reading your work too!
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