Just Another Day – 100 Word Flash Fiction

He felt as if he’d been frozen in time.


“I’ve always had feelings for you Alfred, but…” Sophie pulled her soft hand from his. Her long blue skirt swished as she turned and strode away.

He stood from bended knee and bolted out of the Victorian homestead, then sprinted to the tracks.

There was nothing left for him now.  Alfred heard the rumble of an approaching train. He stepped onto the wooden platform as snowflakes fell in silent flurries soaking the shoulders of his gray wool coat.


“Dude! Do you feel that cold spot? It’s about a hundred degrees today!”


Have you ever felt an unexplained cold spot?

Have you ever gotten a vibe from a place you visited?


When I found this video two weeks ago  it had 34,000 views. Now it has over 37,000,000!

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  1. A great story Susie.
    That final line certainly sent a chill down my back.
    Now & again I’ve had that cold shiver down my spine for no apparent reason. My Gran always described such moments as ‘Someone walking on my grave.” Used to scare the living daylights out of me as a child!

    Taking you up on your offer to post a link to my story in these comments, here it is:


  2. Great story. Love that twist at the end. I’ve felt that really icy hair-raising chill only once, but that was enough. And I felt enough vibes when I visited Westminster Abbey for the first time that I was ready to move in. I’ve never visited anyplace that made me feel so welcome and “I’ve been here before” – unfortunately we were on a tour and I couldn’t take time to explore and find out more about where the vibes were coming from.


    1. Thanks!
      Sounds like a flash back to a past life experience. I am very open minded and never rule anything out. You will definitely have to go back!!
      Thank you for sharing! Now I am experiencing shivers…


  3. Another good one!
    Yes and Yes to your questions:
    I’ve experienced cold spots during brief moments of terror prior to resolution.

    As to ‘gotten a vib’ – During a drive across the southern Appalachian Mountains I felt a compelling urge or longing like I’d lived there before. It is the reason I chose the location for the beginning of my wip historical novel.
    Thanks again Susie 😀


    1. Thank you Rich!
      I just got shivers again. These comments are great!

      That is so good that you recognized the importance of those feelings. I look forward to reading your book some day!


  4. MM… what an interesting explanation for the cold spot. Beautiful.

    Also — I have a friend obsessed with that song and video. I’m pretty sure he’s contributed around 5,000 of the new hits. Haha.


  5. Oh I felt so bad for him. Did he just get rejected after he proposed to her? Great story! I loved the imagery you gave us, too.

    I have felt cold spots before and they always give me pause.

    And, I loved that music video.


  6. Absolutely! A long time ago I had taken a new job managing a property (there was an apartment attached to the office). As soon as I walked into that apartment I could feel a vibe. A couple days later I determined it had to be a bad vibe. I was restless. I couldnt get comfortable to save my life. I had nightmares constantly. Turns out that one of the previous women working there was raped. 😦 Ugh. How horrible. I didn’t stay there long. I couldnt handle the feeling because it was so intense. *sigh*


  7. It was a hot day in Boston when my friends and I felt a cool breeze coming from the side of a building. As we all fought for the sweet air, some guys walked by and hit on us. We all had a good laugh.


  8. It’s not the first time I stumble upon this story, but it was a pleasure to read as before. It’s like every word in it finds the perfect spot and builds the scene, it’s just right, and impressive.
    Thank you.


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