He felt as if he’d been frozen in time.
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“I’ve always had feelings for you Alfred, but…” Sophie pulled her soft hand from his. Her long blue skirt swished as she turned and strode away.
He stood from bended knee and bolted out of the Victorian homestead, then sprinted to the tracks.
There was nothing left for him now. Alfred heard the rumble of an approaching train. He stepped onto the wooden platform as snowflakes fell in silent flurries soaking the shoulders of his gray wool coat.
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“Dude! Do you feel that cold spot? It’s about a hundred degrees today!”
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Have you ever felt an unexplained cold spot?
Have you ever gotten a vibe from a place you visited?
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When I found this video two weeks ago it had 34,000 views. Now it has over 37,000,000!
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Wow, that was a little intense! Good stuff, though.
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Thanks Marcia! I am all about intense…
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Oh I felt so bad for him. Did he just get rejected after he proposed to her? Great story! I loved the imagery you gave us, too.
I have felt cold spots before and they always give me pause.
And, I loved that music video.
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Yep! Thanks Madison.
They are a strange sensation….
I have contributed to many of those views on Youtube! Hahaha!
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Dear Susie,
That was a unique piece. The cold spot angle was out of the blue, yet very well rendered. Loved it.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks Doug! I am so glad you understood it. I push the limits on trying to convey as much as possible within the word constraints…
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Dear Susie,
So do I. You nailed it.
Aloha,
D.
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Very well thought out…the last line caught me by surprise.
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Thanks Granny.
I have to tell you that your avatar just cracks me up every time I see it! So great!
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Just another day, but not just another post!
A truly awesome one!
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Thanks Hook! You are so sweet!
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Love the twist in the story, and the last line gave me chills. Good one, Susie!
Here’s mine:
http://www.jansthoughtsovercoffee.blogspot.com/2012/01/flashfriday-fridayfictioneers-that-girl.html
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I am so glad Jan! Thanks!
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Loved this.
Now that you’ve explained walking through a cold spot, how do you explain the cold spot that follows my feet?
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Bad circulation like mine! Hahaha! Good one~
My feet got wrecked by years of ice skating after school while growing up in Wisconsin.
Thanks for coming by to read~
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That youtube video was actually on my front page of suggestions before I found you blog…now I know why! Thanks for sharing!
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I love that video! I found it on Facebook and had to share!
Thanks for reading!
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Good one Susie!
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Thanks Sheila!
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Creepy in a good way! Very powerful.
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I am glad you liked it Tameri!
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Yes, ( swishing) long blue skirts always leave me train wrecked standing alone in a cold spot…funny you should mention it…lol, Swished….I love that…
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Thanks Paul! Somehow I knew you would! Hahaha! You are so funny! I bet you would be good at these….
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You gave me a chill! Loved it Susie. I used to feel those kinds of cold spots around me when I would write. I’d have to bundle up.
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Thanks Debra!
That is so cool – Really! (pun intended) It makes me wonder if what you were writing attracted them….
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I have awarded you the Kreative Blogger Award! http://wp.me/p1QtlR-xU
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Thanks so much Debra!
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Absolutely! A long time ago I had taken a new job managing a property (there was an apartment attached to the office). As soon as I walked into that apartment I could feel a vibe. A couple days later I determined it had to be a bad vibe. I was restless. I couldnt get comfortable to save my life. I had nightmares constantly. Turns out that one of the previous women working there was raped. 😦 Ugh. How horrible. I didn’t stay there long. I couldnt handle the feeling because it was so intense. *sigh*
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That is intense and a horrible vibe. I wouldn’t be able to stay there either!
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That was pretty good, I guess. It was no red headed rodeo clown, but still good.
Anyways, I was nominated for one of those blog awards things. I passed it along to you, so now you have to do it. Ha ha! You’re supposed to come up with seven facts about yourself and pass it along.
http://badlandsbadley.wordpress.com/2012/01/29/i-guess-my-blog-is-lovely/
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I was on the road coming back from Aspen last night. Thanks so much Nathan! This is such a nice surprise!
Congratulations to you as well~
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What a wonderful glimpse into the spirit world. I have a friend who would adore this drabble; I’m going to send her here to read it right away!
Wonderful read, as always!
The link to my drabble is: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/01/26/grounds/
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Thanks Quill! I appreciate that!
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It was a hot day in Boston when my friends and I felt a cool breeze coming from the side of a building. As we all fought for the sweet air, some guys walked by and hit on us. We all had a good laugh.
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Very cool! Hahaha! I hope he was cute….Thanks for stopping by~
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Beautiful… Heartbreaks are heavy burdens to carry…
And that’s a lovely song!
Here’s my late entry:
http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/30/grow-up-now/
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I am glad you liked it!
I’ll check out yours~
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It’s not the first time I stumble upon this story, but it was a pleasure to read as before. It’s like every word in it finds the perfect spot and builds the scene, it’s just right, and impressive.
Thank you.
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Thanks Norv! Maybe you should consider subscribing since you are my new super fan!
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