An Evening Swim – 100 Word Flash Fiction

swamp New OrleansShe dipped her toe into the placid lake, then stepped in and submerged herself. Her body slid through the water like oil. The cold penetrated her bones the farther out she swam. Storm clouds gathered overhead and rain began to patter. She turned around while slicing through the tranquil surface. Her stomach rumbled. Something moved along the edge of the forest. She sunk back down into the lake and waited.

She lunged at the unsuspecting creature and snapped. After thrashing for a short time, it went limp. As the water turned crimson, she seemed to smile with a toothy grin.


Can you guess which animal took the evening swim?

Have you ever been afraid to go into the water?


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89 thoughts on “An Evening Swim – 100 Word Flash Fiction

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  1. Crocodile! I love your writing style! Yep, a few weeks ago I was terrified to go too deep into the ocean at the Gold Coast. Apparently the sharks there can come up at waist height! :S


  2. Crocodiles in fresh or swamps,sharks in oceans,pirahnas 3D in virtual
    damn they do want us to live fear less 😆
    I love swimming riers,oceans…and have not met with those hungry creatures yet..


  3. Well, I made a nice long reply and then it vanished. I’ll try again. I love to swim at night and could relate to the what your character was feeling. Then…her stomach grumbled and I wondered if we were talking about a human at all. (I guess otter…)

    ~Susan (Here’s mine:


    1. That is so true! It happened to some friends of mine when we traveled to South Carolina to Hilton Head! They left their ball and played through! Scary!
      Thanks for coming by Marcia!


  4. I’d guess Alligator. As for being afraid to go into the water, well I’m not a strong swimmer to begin with. However, growing up down at the shore we would occasionally get lots of jellyfish. That always freaked me out for some reason.


  5. Beautifully written, Susie. I can just hear the jaws snap shut and see the blood dripping from the corner of that toothy grin.


  6. Hi,
    A great story, well done.
    We have plenty of fresh water and salt water crocs, mostly in Northern Australia, there are signs warning people about them. Stick to the pool it is safer. 😀


  7. As the story started I started thinking that she’d better watch out. The prompt didn’t give me the impression I’d want to swim in that water! Haha, so it was a cute surprise when I found out who was doing the swimming 😉


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