Megan glanced out the window pane at a wren struggling against the blustery wind. Over-burdened clouds would soon spill their contents onto the parched landscape. A rumble of thunder rolled across the valley. Its vibration could be felt deep inside her. The smell of rain and mildew wafted into the tiny cabin. He should be back soon.
As Megan wiped up the bathroom, flashes of memories began taunting her. The realization shattered her mind into a million little pieces and she collapsed onto the bloody floor.
While raindrops pattered on the shallow grave, an outstretched hand burst from the muck.
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Do you like cliffhangers or do you prefer clear cut endings?
Photo by Susie Lindau
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I love cliffhangers!! 🙂
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Me too!
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It depends how attatched I am to the characters I guess 😛 In the beginning when I’m mildly curious about them, cliff hangers are fun! But when your emotionally attached to the character, cliff hangers can be dreadful!
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good, writers should torture their readers as much as they can
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I am almost done writing my book and hope to tease the reader all the way through….I love a book I can’t put down.
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If there are too many loose ends and it feels like the book ends just when it is getting good, then I can get a bit frustrated.
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cliffhangers please
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Generally speaking I love the way cliffhangers keep you wanting more. However, I think eventually there has to be some kind of resolution, even if it’s just hinted at.
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I agree although what is a conclusion for one can be something completely different for another. Just ask my book club! Hahaha! But that is the beauty in interpretation.
Thanks Janet!
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Oh! So many questions!! I don’t mind a cliffhanger. It keeps me hanging on! Punny. 🙂 lovely what you did here.
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/03/02/fools-gold/
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Thanks TheOthers! I will stop by and take a peek.
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Really liked this, just the right kind of setup before a cliffhanger.
I think cliffhanger’s work best if there’s enough infomration to draw your own conclusions. In very short fic like this i kind of expect that. It’s great to get a slice of story that gives a decent impression of what’s going on, before pulling the rug from under you. That really counts if it’s 100 or 10,000 words.
And, I can’t resist a good potential zombie – or any other sort of macabre end twist!
My effort here: http://joannakneilson.wordpress.com/2012/03/02/flash-fiction-friday-bloody-jewels/
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Thanks Joanna! I am so glad that you understood where I was going with this and you know it won’t end well for Megan…..Mwahahaha!
Happy Friday to you~
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Oh that’s good a hand from the muck. Yikes! You got me. Have a bloody good weekend, tee hee, just had to say that. 🙂
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Hahaha!
Thanks Gardenlilie! I was motivated by the gloomy weather yesterday. Have a bloody good weekend as well!
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Reminds me of that old movie Poltergeist. Creepy!
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Oh Yah!! Loved that movie…Thanks John!
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Love a good CL. Loved the story.
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Thanks Edward! I really do too. I am writing a book that is filled with them to get the reader to hang on to their hats! Hey that is another idiom for you! When are you going to write your book? I couldn’t find any good ones out there…
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Nice work, I’ll look into it. And here’s that book I was rambling about a while ago. Looks alright. Not a patch on what I could do, of course, but you know how these things are.
http://blog.inkyfool.com/2011/08/etymologicon.html
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carrie baby ending .:)
well done
HUGGGGGGGGGGGGG
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Thanks Linda! Hahaha!
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Yes that was my first thought, I will never forget that Carrie ending. This is a superb thriller Susie!
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Hey, Thanks Catherine!!
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I enjoy a good cliffhanger if I have enough to make my own conclusions. Otherwise I just feel left hanging. I do like a clear cut ending though too. Have a Great Weekend:)
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Thanks!
I agree that if it is done well, I can come to my own conclusions. In writing my own novel, I want to keep some minor parts open-ended for a sequel!
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Hi Susie,
I enjoyed this because the ending made me stop and think about the glimpses of subplot to this flash. Well crafted and superbly dark. I will be back.
Talia.
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Thanks Linton and for subscribing! I really love to write humor, but these super dark flash fictions just race from my head, to my fingers, to the screen! I actually came up with two dark tales yesterday. I am saving one for later….
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Look forward to reading Susie.
Talia.
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I want this one to continue. There needs to be more. NO want cliffhanger here. 😦
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Hahaha! I know, it would be fun to see how Megan reacts to her now undead husband….and how was he killed in the first place? So many loose ends and yet….
Thanks Debra!
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A good one. He’s certainly down and clearly dirty. And he will be back soon! 😦
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He sure will! The punny twist this week was in the title..
Thanks Sandra!
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I love cliffhangers to keep me reading, but clear-cut endings for a satisfactory finish. Great story, Susie. I liked the tension you built with the hand appearing. 🙂
Here’s a little piece I wrote for Five Sentence Fiction if you’re interested:
http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/03/five-sentence-fiction-enchanted.html
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Thanks! That’s the way I like them too. I really want the hand to do more, but I wanted to keep the story within the 100 word restriction.
I will check it out!
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I’m so intrigued! Well done.
Mine’s here: http://threedescriptors.wordpress.com/2012/03/02/flash-fiction-12-the-caper
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Thanks Miq!
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Dear Susie,
That guy was digging out of the grave so that he could get out of Dodge. No way he’d stick around and get murdered twice. Lovely story this week.
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/03/02/you-are-free-to-do-what-we-tell-you/
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I like that idea! Hahaha!
Thanks Doug.
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Very mysterious! Who was killed? Did she do it or did “he” and leave her the mess (I wouldn’t be surprised…) Now I wonder what happens next (and what happened before!)
~Susan (http://www.susanwenzel.com/)
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Thanks Susan? Good questions! Hahaha! I will check out your as well.
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In this kind of flash fiction, cliffhangers are perfect as it gives us a sense that there’s more beyond what we think we know.
In longer stories, I generally believe that cliffhangers should only be left if there’s definitely a follow-up coming. Patrick Ness’ Chaos Walking trilogy is perfect in that sense, an exception that proves the rule, I guess!
Sorry, I’m rambling. I loved your story (I particularly like my zombie fiction) and got the sense that maybe she murdered her husband, but her fragile mind kept her from realising it fully – a little like Macbeth in that regard, I think. No matter how much you try to clean up, the blood just won’t wash off.
The poor fella won’t be too happy when he gets up, I reckon…
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On a related note (I hope you don’t mind), I’m trying out a little experimental zombie piece myself so if you fancy a quick read, here’s a link:
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/03/01/arrivingatgreengate/
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Thanks! On Fridays I encourage other fiction writers to leave their links. I will check it out!
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Hahaha! I don’t think that he will be happy at all!
Thank you so much Niiko! It’s my first zombie story.
I agree about cliffhangers since books should include some kind of resolution and yet if a few inconsequential loose ends are not tied up neatly, it can leave room for a sequel!
I will have to check out Patrick Ness’ triology!
Thank you!
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Hi,
Great story. How you manage to get a story across in 100 words is amazing, and talk about a cliffhanger, when is Part 2. 😀
Enjoyed the video as well. 🙂
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Thanks Mags! I love the challenge in editing. I probably will move on from this one…The video rocks literally! Hahaha!
Have a great weekend!
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Hi Susie,
That should be a fun homecoming. He’ll definitely need a shower and does he get to do the same to Megan now? Great descriptive passage to begin the story. Maybe Megan will figure out killing in the house is very messy and take it outside.
Horror movie memories triggered!
Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/
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I know and she just cleaned the shower! Hahaha! I am sure that she will…although tile cleans up really nicely!
Thanks I will check it out~
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I dig it, Susie! Do you write thrillers by chance? I’m surprised I never asked before… You have a knack for suspense.
As far as endings, I like cliffhangers when they’re done well—when they leave us thinking without just trying to be tricky or cool. 😉
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Thanks August!
I am almost done with a paranormal fiction set in Provence. I am hoping to keep a lot of suspense running throughout the book so the reader can’t put it down. That’s the plan anyway! I may leave a couple of loose ends open-ended, but the main plot will come to a conclusion. I would like to write a sequel if it turns out that people actually read it. We’ll see!
Hey your brownie cake is almost gone… ; (
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These weather descriptions were beautiful. Funny how some people can make 100 words seem much longer (in a good way).
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Thanks AM! It was a moody weather day yesterday. It threatened to snow all afternoon.
I hope you will stop by again soon!
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Hello, my Colorado Buffalo, friend! Still praying for you… hehehe
I like both cliffhangers as well as nice tidy endings. Depends on the book, or movie, or tv show. Loved the way Harry Potter tied some things up, but left others till the next book.
Interesting question.
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With Harry Potter I gotta believe they left it open-ended for the next generation. Loved that!
What do you mean praying??? Hahaha!
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Ayeee…. no hand in the muck, no no no… there go my dreams tonight! 😉
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Hahaha! Good to see you. Just close your eyes and think happy thoughts….
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