“Hello boys! I’m Minnie Taylor and I’m the proud new owner of Potts Acres.”
Justin gave Collin a look and reached out his hand to shake hers. “Hello Ma’am.”
“I just love it out here in the country. I reckon it’ll be perfect for my Bible camp. Starts this Sunday. You boys should come on by. I know there’s a lot of work to be done. Lord knows them hooligans been using poor old Aunt Mildred’s property for the work of the devil. See you on Sunday!” The chubby pink-faced lady turned and strutted out of the corner drug store as the two boys stood with their mouths agape.
“Bible camp?”
“You should’ve told her.”
“You should’ve!”
“Well she’ll find out on 4/20 when every kid from the county rolls in to roll up a joint. I always thought it was pretty ironic, the name and all.”
“What’s ironic mean?”
Would you tell her or avoid confrontation?
Awesome Friday the 13th video – Higher and Higher!
Photo by Madison Woods
Do tell, do. Avoiding confrontation’s for sissies!
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Bring it on!!! Thanks Jared!
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Did I miss the fun? I think not. But I do pity Minnie Taylor. Did the name Potts Acre not strike a chord when she was buying the property? BTW, I think the pun over there is great for literary device. All said and done, a
lesson from the Bible will not harm the boys, and the ‘hooligans.’ At best, they would only laugh in poor Minnie’s face.
Could you maybe develop it for a YA short story or novel?
Here is mine: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/04/13/flash-fiction-story-eloped/
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That would be a funny second chapter. I never know what I may do with these flashes! They may be expanded on….some day… I do love these characters!
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I don’t think she gave them time to tell her. And I’d love to be there to watch the fireworks go down. Great tale, Susie. I grinned the whole time.
Here’s mine:
http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/04/running-100words-for-fridayfictioneers.html
Siobhan
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Thanks Siobhan! I would love to see her face and how long it would take her to figure it out, if she did at all! 🙂
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Ha ha! Poor Minnie.
Reference the video: Great fun, but in reality if he was trying to catch he truck don’t you think some of those crazy flips were slowing down his progress? Ha ha. I want to be able to move like that.
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Pretty good show although I have seen better parkour. I loved the song!
I think Minnie may have her blinders on for a little while anyway…I think she probably wears a little hat. 🙂
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I would tell her. Imagine her dismay when 4/20 arrives.
http://swthink.blogspot.com/2012/04/michael.html
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It would be a shocker! Thanks for stopping by. I just found your comment in my spam filter. Not sure how it got there. I will stop by and read yours.
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Loving your post – ha! I probably would let her figure it out and make her own conclusion. Have a Great Weekend!
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Thanks Renee! It would be fun to sit back and watch it unfold!
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A very popular one this week, Susie! Deservedly so, if you ask me. Great dialogue, great characters…just great. Really enjoyed the humour.
As for the question: I’m really not sure! I pride myself on being a good person so I guess I’d tell her. Although the alternative does appeal to my mischievous side… 😀
Mine is this-a-way:
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/04/13/134/
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Awesome response and I would have to agree and it would be really to watch her reaction.
Thanks so much for your kind words!
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She seems pretty naive, wonder if she’ll get the connection!
Here’s mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/04/13/the-incident/
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Hard to say! I think it could take her a while even after the cars and trucks start arriving. Thanks for reading~
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This is a great piece, Susie! I don’t know how you’re able to write 100 and 150 word flash fiction. So challenging! I took up Debra Kristi’s challenge to write a flash fiction story based on one of her photos from last Friday’s post and 300 words is what I came up with (cut it down from over 400). I really admire you for writing these.
Let’s see, would I tell the lady? Part of me would want to, and the other part would think, hey, she’ll preach to a bunch of pot heads and they’ll be trippin’ on her words and she won’t even realize they’re all stoned! She might convert a few of them, or she might get a contact high! Uh-oh!
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Thanks Lynn! She might! Hahaha! I could see expanding on this one just because the characters are so comical and I would love to explore her reactions to all of the kids. Maybe I should do part II on April 20th next Friday! That would be so funny! We’ll see!
I will definitely be over to read yours. They are a lot of fun and are a great lesson in editing!
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In answer to the question: “How much action can you fit into 150 words?” … a complete scene.
Tell the tale or avoid confrontation? I have to answer twice: as a writer, of course, I’d be choosing whatever option made the most trouble; in real life — duck and cover. Plot is defined as the stuff we take long detours to avoid in real life.
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I am not sure that I asked the question of how much action will fit into 150 words, but I like your answer in confronting the character to make trouble. That is what we should always do to create drama.Thanks for stopping by. Not sure if you liked or hated it or anything else I have written….. 🙂
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Found your blog for the first time today! You left a comment on my flash fiction … and led me to the original photo-prompt. (Love it, by the way. I’m a long-form writer who reads flash fiction in a spirit of admiration and envy–like watching gymnasts at the Olympics.)
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I am glad to hear that! I love the exercise since I am working on my first book and flash fiction is great for editing practice. You should join us!
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Thanks EP! Your comment got thrown into my spam filter and I fished it out today. I hope you will stop by again soon! I write flash fiction every Friday. 🙂
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This is just great!
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Thanks so much JM! I missed your comment somehow…
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i’m a goodie two shoes, so I’d tell her
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I would be tempted, but I wonder if she would have let me get a word in edgewise! Hahaha! Thanks Louise!
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Noooo.. don’t tell her.. because then you have the next part of your story!! 🙂
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I know that is what I was thinking! Thanks Smidgen!
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This is hilarious!
Lol! Love the title of your post too. Those are some high hopes indeed!
Parul
http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/04/13/the-dark-tunnel/
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Thanks Parul!
There are a couple of puns in this story. I am glad you recognized them!
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Haha, a little story full of double meanings. I’d probably try to tell the lady, but I know she wouldn’t listen. So then I’d sure like to be the fly on the wall when it all began to make sense to her…but I suspect it’ll take some explaining on someone’s behalf, haha.
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Thanks Madison! I agree about Minnie. I think she wouldn’t understand and it may be hard to get through to her… 🙂
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Someone is going to have lots of ‘splaining to do.
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I wonder who will ‘splain it to Millie…Thanks for reading Cayman!
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Good one, Susie. Pretty funny, and clever with the 4/20 thing.
http://tedstrutz.com/2012/04/14/100-words-flash-friday-fictioneers-the-underpass/
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Thanks Ted! I will check out yours!
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I’m laughing so hard… I .. can’t.. type!
Great work, Susie!
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Thanks Hook! I am glad Minnie and the boys could make you smile… 🙂
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Hmmm…I commented here Friday but it’s gone! Ug…I said that I thought Aunt Mildred knew exactly what the kids did on her property and that she was planning a little bit of reform during Bible camp!
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That is so weird Susan! I wasn’t in my spam file either! I found 2 other Fictioneers in there. Next time tweet me and I will check right away! \
I love your idea that she would one up them and is prepared for the onslot this coming Friday! Hahaha!
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I wouldn’t be surprised if some of those boys had seen the devil. Along with Elvis, a cadre of Smurfs, and the Stay Puft Marshmallow Man.
This one made me chuckle quite heartily! That doesn’t happen to me often. Like the title, too!
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Thanks Jake! I bet some have and maybe they can be saved by Minnie on the 20th! Hahaha!
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