The scent of fresh pine tugged her from a deep sleep, but she hung on to the tendrils of the hazy dream. If she opened her eyes now, it would slip away.
Scenes flashed in a cool caress and pulled her into a subconscious state. She walked through a dark forest. She was not alone.
The hunter was close. His footfalls crunched on the leaves and twigs of the forest floor. Somehow the game had gotten out of control. She had wanted him to catch her like before, and yet the growing fear of a different outcome stood in her way.
I don’t trust him.
He peered through the doorway. The hospital worker scrubbed floors with a mop while she remained in a coma. This time he’d gone too far.
That was the first ending I wrote, but wasn’t sure that readers would like the dark ending. Was I wrong or what? Thanks for voting. The results will help me with the completion of my rewrite!
A brilliant idea letting us choose, I chose the beach scene, because it did bring on a smile. 🙂
Thanks so much and for reading them! I will have to go and check out how they are doing…..
This you already know dear Susie 🙂 I’ve nominated you for the Kreativ Blogger Award: http://spirativity.co.uk/2012/06/01/the-kreativ-blogger-in-i/
Thanks so much! You really made my day! Congrats to you as well… 🙂
Hi Susie! Really liked the choose your ending. I thought the sinister one went with the tone of the rest of the piece. 🙂
Thanks Kecia! I am glad you liked this. I wasn’t sure anyone would play along, but many did!
These flash fictions are helping me with a book I working on. Knowing that readers like a little darkness will help me with my rewrite.
I hope you will stop by with a link on Wednesday!