Fractured Dreams – Flash Fiction Friday – You Choose

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The scent of fresh pine tugged her from a deep sleep, but she hung on to the tendrils of the hazy dream. If she opened her eyes now, it would slip away.

Scenes flashed in a cool caress and pulled her into a subconscious state. She walked through a dark forest. She was not alone.

The hunter was close. His footfalls crunched on the leaves and twigs of the forest floor. Somehow the game had gotten out of control. She had wanted him to catch her like before, and yet the growing fear of a different outcome stood in her way.

I don’t trust him.

The Winner!

He peered through the doorway. The hospital worker scrubbed floors with a mop while she remained in a coma. This time he’d gone too far.

That was the first ending I wrote, but wasn’t sure that readers would like the dark ending. Was I wrong or what? Thanks for voting. The results will help me with the completion of my rewrite!

72 thoughts on “Fractured Dreams – Flash Fiction Friday – You Choose

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  1. Three good endings… and all different. I choose #1, although I would have left off the last line.
    #2 was my second choice… you are a clever girl.

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  2. I like this idea! I chose three, purely because I’m tempted to do the same whenever I see my mother asleep. She’d kill me, but it would be worth it!

    I won’t post a link to mine yet, as it hasn’t been written or even conceived yet. I’ll be back with that later.

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    1. You have a bit of the devil in yah Jake. Hahaha! Hey, so do I or I wouldn’t have thought of it… πŸ™‚
      Post away after you write your flash-
      Thanks! I am glad you stopped by!

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  3. Story was a good lead-in to choice C. I’d love to write flash fiction but my brain overthinks the story and I wind up writing a story that probably won’t end.

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  4. Interesting Susie… I went with the more sinister outcome as I could feel a little bit of revenge coming on. However, according to the results so far, it isn’t the most popular choice!

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  5. First choice: Too grim, and I’m just not in a dark mood today – But I was was making the choice monday morning at work, things might be different…

    Second choice: Score!!! Makes me smile and feel nostalgic, cause I’ve done it before! πŸ˜€ Extra fun when when subject is sleeping on stomach with no strings attached… Hee! Hee! Hee! πŸ™‚

    Third Choice: Nah, that’s just too mean – even for a monday morning at work. At least 1st victim is in coma and not feeling anything, and 2nd victim will jump up hopping mad, but she’ll soon get over it… But wide open mouthed snoring on youtube viral video??? The humiliation could last for years, and she might never get over the shame! Sub that one out to the Marquis Du Sade, or maybe the president of a college fraternity, cause that’s their kind of gig… not mine!

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      1. Hey, once ya go Black, ya never… Uhm… wait a minute, OK – now I’m with ya! As in sports commentator and not majority of guys playing pro sports! (said with respect, of course) LOL πŸ˜€

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  6. Im sure many have said this already but i will too, love how we get to choose the ending, the story engages you even more that way. First ending for me aswell.

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    1. I am glad you jumped in and voted! Thanks for stopping by.

      I hope you’ll join me next week for another Use Me and Abuse Me day! Talk about interactive fun. Well you will love it!

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      1. three different endings for three different personalities… which way does your mood blow? Much fun and very creative..

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        1. You’re right about the different moods. Thanks!
          Come back next Wednesday for Use Me and Abuse Me Day II !! That will be a really fun party. I have to rest up over the weekend….. πŸ™‚

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  7. Oh not only was the story superb I just loved the very idea of voting and letting us choose one…this is fun πŸ™‚
    it was tough all the three options were brilliant but after spending a lot of time and moving cursor over 1st and 3rd i finally chose the 1st option..yay to dark endings πŸ™‚

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    1. That is so great! I a wrote a paranormal fiction and although it has it’s light funny spots it will get dark too. (in the middle of a rewrite). Blogging does help to see what readers enjoy.
      Thanks so much for the input Soma!

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    1. It’s not over yet! I am so glad you liked the idea.
      I wrote the dark ending first and then thought writing alternative humorous endings might be fun!
      Thanks Debra!

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