A Twisted Tale – Flash Fiction

Alice hurried along the path of the ancient forest in fading light. Listening to her elders and obeying were two different things and now she was hungry and lost.

As night descended, fog slithered like silent serpents through the understory. She stopped in her tracks as it wrapped around her narrow ankles and swallowed the trail.

While reconsidering the fork one mile back, Alice noticed a twinkling light in the distance. She trotted towards it.

In the twilight, the thatch-roofed cottage appeared inviting and the scent of baked apples lured her to the threshold. She knocked twice and waited.

A white-haired old woman cracked open the door, peeked out at her and screamed.

Alice growled and burst through the entry, gobbling the pie with one bite. Her bushy tail wagged in delight.

Her elders never could understand why Alice chose to be a vegetarian.

What is your favorite fairy tale?

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  1. Cute and funny. So I am always looking for ‘the moral of the story or meaning’ and I don’t know why, let’s blame that on childhood. lol. The fork, the fog and the twinklin’ lights and with that you have put a nice spin on an old tale. In other stuff, may I ask you a ? I see you have a copyright for your blog, do I need a copyscape or something like that? Can anyone take something if you don’t have that there? Thanks.


    1. WordPress has one that you can copy and modify to put on your blog. I think the copyright dissuades people from stealing material. If I ever found one of my stories under another author’s name in a published book for sale, they would hear from me.
      I have heard that since you “publish” your blog, it is automatically copyrighted. But I read recently where you should send them in to be copyrighted. The jury is out on that one. Pun intended…..I’ll let you know what I find out.
      Thanks Lilie!


    2. Susie…I forgot to answer the ? My favorite fairytale…there are so many, but snow white, three little pigs or pinocchio come to mind. The saddest one is the little match girl by far.


      1. The vivid imagery of those stories just popped right into my head when reading your titles. They really did shape my perspective of the world when growing up. Thanks for coming back and sharing!


  2. A wonderful piece of writing Susie. So much in just 100 words.
    I loved some of your descriptions, such as, “As night descended, fog slithered like silent serpents through the understory. She stopped in her tracks as it wrapped around her narrow ankles and swallowed the trail.” Some great imagery here.
    While the elders couldn’t understand her vegetarian leanings I bet the white haired old woman was glad of them.


  3. Excellent tale! Brought a smile to my face. Very nice description of the woods too! Favorite Fairy tale…mmm not sure. Jack and the Bean Stalk, Hansel and Gretel both come to mind first.


    1. Those are great ones. I am thinking of doing a series of twisted tales based on the classics. This would be my twist on Little Red Riding Hood.
      Thanks so much SF! Smiling is good.. 🙂


  4. I love it, Alice the Vegan Wolf. I liked both Grimms’ Fairy Tales and the Canterbury Tales very much when I was a youngster, not that I have much recollection of any of them now that I’m an oldster with a severe case of CRS (Can’t Remember Shit).


    1. You should pick up a copy of both sometime. The illustrations alone in some of those books are worth a look. They are such well-told stories.
      Thanks V! I am glad that you “got” Alice!


    1. Actually I thought it was more of a twist on Red Riding Hood after I wrote it, but I can see the Hansel and Gretel slant too! Now I want to write more. They would be fun to illustrate! Thanks Bliss!


  5. Great story, the “trotting” made me wonder what was going on here, and the tail finished it off for me – a cute twist indeed!
    If I had one concrit, it would be that the lines about the elders felt a tiny bit clumsy in what is quite a fast-paced piece, I’m wondering if there is some way you could merge this information in better, but I haven’t any concrete suggestions i’m afraid.


    1. I am thinking of doing a series of twisted tales from the original stories we grew up with. We’ll see.
      I was hungry for the slab apple cake sitting on the kitchen counter when I wrote this! Hahaha!
      Thanks so much!


  6. Haha… very interesting! On another note, I’m always amazed at your ability to write, to follow, to comment, and to respond. You’re a true blogging gem within this digital sphere 🙂


  7. Hahahaha! That’s awesome. You know, I’ve been watching the first season of “Grim” and saw an episode the other night that this reminds me of. 😀 I was thinking about it as I was reading your piece. Your words brought the visuals to mind. Love that twist.


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